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[Duke 437]

Hey guys,

I would love it if you could check out my cover of Pyramids by Frank Ocean. It's my first youtube upload, did it in one take but here goes!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DKIKpOZm1pE

Edited February 15, 2013 by Duke

[KrisFromMars 9]

Anybody from the nyc area PM me I'm a singer songwriter I would love to collaborate with other creative monsters!

[Jjang 2,262]

Other Song I Wrote :
http://gagadaily.com...29#entry2244812

Edited February 2, 2014 by Jjang

[wiltedbliss 915]

I love it! But you shouldnt post them! People might steal them, you may never know

[Jjang 2,262]

Ahh It got moved to this section,OK.

I love it! But you shouldnt post them! People might steal them, you may never know

Thanks,And I don't care :)

Hey guys,

I would love it if you could check out my cover of Pyramids by Frank Ocean. It's my first youtube upload, did it in one take but here goes!

http://www.youtube.c...KpOZm1pE[/media]

It's Great,I don't know the song though.

[Jjang 2,262]

I wrote everything that was flowing through my mind, I'm not sure if it should be a song/poem because it's just a rough draft. What are your thoughts? Any advice?

I’ve seen too many crash and burn,

My success is what I yearn.

I leave everything behind,

A twisted tale, a troubled mind.

Heaven’s just a step away,

Gotta keep on fighting

Till I get my way

I’m a b---h without a cause, rebel without a gun,

Gonna make my dreams come true,

I’m a b---h without a cause, a dreamer on the run

Gonna make my name, a king of the game

Censored by society, which tells me no,

Drive fast, there’s only one way to go

Feel free,

Just the open road ahead of me

The eternal glory, the eternal flame,

Feeling like a winner, in for the kill

On a mission, to make a change

I’m a b---h without a cause, rebel without a gun,

Gonna make my dreams come true,

I’m a b---h without a cause, a dreamer on the run

Gonna make my name, a king of the game

Keep on trying, tear me down,

I’d like to see you come and try

You have high highlights and low lows in your songwriting,I like it a lot in general,But you should get rid of lyrics like "Gonna Make my dreams come true" And that " I'm on a mission " parts.

When you write a song you should 100% focus on the concept,Don't add lyrics that make you look like you're running out of ideas.

But i like a lot of lyrics like :

I’m a b---h without a cause, rebel without a gun,

I’m a b---h without a cause, a dreamer on the run

I leave everything behind,

A twisted tale, a troubled mind.

:worship2:

[Urban 9]

You have high highlights and low lows in your songwriting,I like it a lot in general,But you should get rid of lyrics like "Gonna Make my dreams come true" And that " I'm on a mission " parts.

When you write a song you should 100% focus on the concept,Don't add lyrics that make you look like you're running out of ideas.

But i like a lot of lyrics like :

:worship2:

Thanks for the advice, I'm just a beginner, and I really want to get better, I need as much constructive criticism as I can get :hug:

[SidDays 244]

Something I made that was inspired by Bloody Mary :)

This is cool o_o

Edited February 16, 2013 by Toxic

[Jjang 2,262]

Thanks for the advice, I'm just a beginner, and I really want to get better, I need as much constructive criticism as I can get

I'm a songwriter myself,You're a great one! You should be proud :)

Check mines couple of posts above you.

[nativenewyorker 1,190]

Inspired by my friend's story.

Other Song I Wrote :

http://gagadaily.com...29#entry2244812

imo, your songs sound like Lana Del Rey rip offs. Really cliche-ridden.

[paul 687]

I have such a bad habit of writing a song to a melody and realising afterwards that I've subconciously stolen said melody :toofunny:

[Jjang 2,262]

imo, your songs sound like Lana Del Rey rip offs. Really cliche-ridden.

:( OK.

I always try to do Gaga then i end up being Lana

But really,That's my only style.

And also,Lana's songwriting is absolutely incredible,So i'm not bothered.

Edited February 16, 2013 by Jjang

[nativenewyorker 1,190]

:( OK.

I always try to do Gaga then i end up being Lana

But really,That's my only style.

And also,Lana's songwriting is absolutely incredible,So i'm not bothered.

I hope that didn't sound mean or anything haha. But yeah, it's just that you have a tendency to even use the same lines that she does. Not really a good way to start out with writing so break that habit now!

[Urban 9]

I'm a songwriter myself,You're a great one! You should be proud :)

Check mines couple of posts above you.

Thanks I feel like I have a lot of work to do, do you think classes help?

Again...I can't find that thread again anyways,Mods please merge :)

~

Again,Sorry for my laziness and being a pain in the ass.

I like it, I love how its all concise, and I see what you mean about me ( how it sounds like I ran out of ideas part) because yours doesn't have that, its great I love the chorus and the meaning

[Jjang 2,262]

I hope that didn't sound mean or anything haha. But yeah, it's just that you have a tendency to even use the same lines that she does. Not really a good way to start out with writing so break that habit now!

Well it's only a couple of lyrics here and there but 80% of it is not the same,As much as i love Lana i have to admit a lot of her songs include the same lyrics and same lines.

I really don't even try,It just comes naturally

I was born to be a Lana Del Rey copycat

Jesus save me :ohno:

Edited February 17, 2013 by Jjang