FentyGa 14,340 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 lemme preface this by saying-i love fun tonight it’s my second favourite on traumatica (after ROM), but there’s one glaring issue-the lyrics. i have a feeling that their simplicity was intentional, because we know what gaga’s capable of. yet, i can’t deny that they’re basic and a lil...tired so, i decided to rewrite parts of the song/make changes where i personally would if i was given the song (most of the changes are in the second verse lol) Veil a feeling that I can't explain Think it's a wound I still entertain I'd do anything to numb the flame I guess I'm just on fire these days I can't see straight, I can't see me There's too much hurt caught in between Wish I could be what I know I can This moment's hijacked my plans I'm feeling the way that I'm feeling, I'm feeling with you I stare at the girl in the mirror, she talks to me too Yeah, I can see it in your face You don't think I pull my weight Maybe I should give in to fears tonight 'cause I'm feeling the way that I'm feeling, I'm feeling with you I'm not having fun tonight You love the drama and love the game Even though you know it causes me pain Languishing in an inferno cell Hoping someone hears me when I yell “What happens now? I'm not okay” ‘Cause if I scream, you walk away When I cry, you won’t take the blame I've had enough Why do I stay? I'm feeling the way that I'm feeling, I'm feeling with you I stare at the girl in the mirror, she talks to me too Yeah, I can see it in your face You don't think I pull my weight Maybe I should give into fears tonight 'cause I'm feeling the way that I'm feeling, I'm feeling with you I'm not having fun tonight Oh oh oh oh Oh oh oh oh Oh oh oh oh I'm not having fun tonight Oh oh oh oh Oh oh oh oh Oh oh oh oh I'm not having fun tonight Yeah, I can see it in your face You don't think I pull my weight Maybe I’ll throw my pride away right noq 'cause I'm feeling the way that I'm feeling, I'm feeling with you I'm not having fun tonight so, any thoughts? anything else yall would change? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
evgenigerm2 4,056 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 not to be rude, but feels like someone used too much google translate and thesaurus writing those they feel pushed „I allow myself to fail. I allow myself to break. I'm not afraid of my flaws.“ Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KeepOnSwimming 847 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 ...and why though? 😂 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NFRatwell 23,290 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 The lyrics arnt the problem with Fun Tonight. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
WhiteWitch 720 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 Did you change “Feeling something that I can’t explain” to “Veil a feeling that I can’t explain”? Some of this isn’t making sense I’m sorry Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sorcerer92 837 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 First, there is nothing basic about the lyrics to Fun Tonight. They're a beautifully crafted look into the mind of a woman who is struggling to embrace her full potential. A woman who "stares into the mirror" and sees someone full of pain and failure. A woman who is so wrapped-up in sorrow she can't enjoy the "fun" of life. A woman longing to turn her life around but can't quite make the step to do it, yet. To even attempt to "fix" the lyrics of Fun Tonight is messing with a pivotal moment on the album. Your re-imagining of the lyrics is not good. You've removed so many key lyrics and the results are what I'd consider basic lyrics. The magic of the lyrical content of Chromatica is that each song tells a story. When I play the song and go through your lyrics, there is no flow. There's also no soul. It feels like a song one of the bubble-gum pop girls would write. When fans try and re-write or say the lyrics are basic, they're basically insulting Lady Gaga's intelligence. She is more educated and intelligent than any of us on this forum will ever be about songwriting. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red 97,851 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 This is what happens when you try to fix what isn't broken If you see me posting like crazy, I'm either bored or procrastinating. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
dynamite 55,816 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 Changed, not fixed the original lyrics are fine as they are Like a poem said by a neydy in red Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
RickMonster98 7,454 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 "Maybe its time for us to say goodbye" is the better lyric there and u took it away like that Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
holy scheisse 22,164 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 Ooof. Tough crowd Anyway stream fun tonight in all its glory Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sorcerer 12,462 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 49 minutes ago, FentyGa said: You love the drama and love the game I can't believe you removed "you love the paparazzi, love the fame" like that Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
AVeryGagaHolyDick 24,324 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 The only thing I would change is “you don't think I pull my weight” ➡️“you think I don't pull my weight” Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
FentyGa 14,340 Posted December 26, 2020 Author Share Posted December 26, 2020 1 hour ago, evgenigerm2 said: not to be rude, but feels like someone used too much google translate and thesaurus writing those they feel pushed pls they’re still simple 1 hour ago, Sorceress said: I can't believe you removed "you love the paparazzi, love the fame" like that i actually like that lyric, i just wanted to add to the story this lyric feels like it’s just for the sake of referencing the fame rather than actually adding to the song 1 hour ago, Sorcerer92 said: First, there is nothing basic about the lyrics to Fun Tonight. They're a beautifully crafted look into the mind of a woman who is struggling to embrace her full potential. A woman who "stares into the mirror" and sees someone full of pain and failure. A woman who is so wrapped-up in sorrow she can't enjoy the "fun" of life. A woman longing to turn her life around but can't quite make the step to do it, yet. To even attempt to "fix" the lyrics of Fun Tonight is messing with a pivotal moment on the album. Your re-imagining of the lyrics is not good. You've removed so many key lyrics and the results are what I'd consider basic lyrics. The magic of the lyrical content of Chromatica is that each song tells a story. When I play the song and go through your lyrics, there is no flow. There's also no soul. It feels like a song one of the bubble-gum pop girls would write. When fans try and re-write or say the lyrics are basic, they're basically insulting Lady Gaga's intelligence. She is more educated and intelligent than any of us on this forum will ever be about songwriting. that’s the thing, that’s your interpretation i see it as a song about struggles with self-confidence and self-image. gaga not valuing herself and not giving herself the credit she deserves, and wrapped up in insecurity. but, ultimately, a poorly-written song with cliché analogies and and filler lyrics. i reworked it and added to the story via my own lens. gaga’s good at writing pop songs, obviously. but that doesn’t mean every song’s perfect lol. some are weaker than others Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stephen 30,420 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 1 hour ago, Sorcerer92 said: First, there is nothing basic about the lyrics to Fun Tonight. They're a beautifully crafted look into the mind of a woman who is struggling to embrace her full potential. A woman who "stares into the mirror" and sees someone full of pain and failure. A woman who is so wrapped-up in sorrow she can't enjoy the "fun" of life. A woman longing to turn her life around but can't quite make the step to do it, yet. To even attempt to "fix" the lyrics of Fun Tonight is messing with a pivotal moment on the album. Your re-imagining of the lyrics is not good. You've removed so many key lyrics and the results are what I'd consider basic lyrics. The magic of the lyrical content of Chromatica is that each song tells a story. When I play the song and go through your lyrics, there is no flow. There's also no soul. It feels like a song one of the bubble-gum pop girls would write. When fans try and re-write or say the lyrics are basic, they're basically insulting Lady Gaga's intelligence. She is more educated and intelligent than any of us on this forum will ever be about songwriting. WORK 5 minutes ago, FentyGa said: gaga’s good at writing pop songs, obviously. but that doesn’t mean every song’s perfect lol. some are weaker than others You made it weaker --- People need to stop coming for this song. When she eventually performs it as a piano ballad it's gonna tear your heart out. The lyrics are perfect and heartbreaking Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
MonsterMom 12,647 Posted December 26, 2020 Share Posted December 26, 2020 2 hours ago, NFRatwell said: The lyrics arnt the problem with Fun Tonight. There isn’t anything wrong with fun tonight! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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