NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 Hey monsters!! I've already shared some songs of mine here (may be some of you recognize me). This morning I wrote this song, that I composed a long ago. I like the concept, how it sounds. This is not the full version. I removed the second verse and the second chorus to make it in a demo format. Tell me what you think, any constructive advice? EDIT: don't even try to listen to it without headphones Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Velvet 10,988 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 Intro: (shaking) Verses: (bopping) Chorus: (belly dancing) Ending: (wig snatched) Less autotune... I'm like some kind of supernova Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
JR Gg 12,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 Cut the heavy vocal effect because I can't even hear the lyrics properly. I like the melody but the production is a bit too heavy for me You can make the piano (¿) louder a bit Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Author Share Posted November 11, 2017 5 minutes ago, Ivy Aguas said: Intro: (shaking) Verses: (bopping) Chorus: (belly dancing) Ending: (wig snatched) Less autotune... I know I use it a lot but I guess my voice needs it Thanks for commenting!!! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Author Share Posted November 11, 2017 Just now, JR Gg said: Cut the heavy vocal effect because I can't even hear the lyrics properly. I like melody but it's a bit too heavy for me You can make the piano (¿) louder a bit well I record with the mic of my headphones so I got a quality problem on my recordings. That's why I try to mix it as good as I can so it sounds correct but well, I know it doesn't sound professional. I'm gonna adjust to piano, thank you for your advice Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
JR Gg 12,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 1 minute ago, NIGHTCRAWLER said: well I record with the mic of my headphones so I got a quality problem on my recordings. That's why I try to mix it as good as I can so it sounds correct but well, I know it doesn't sound professional. I'm gonna adjust to piano, thank you for your advice It's not bad actually, you can try writing songs and maybe send it to labels Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Author Share Posted November 11, 2017 Just now, JR Gg said: It's not bad actually, you can try writing songs and maybe send it to labels well I actually wrote 4 albums, this one is part of the third one called "Out Loud". I made like 700 songs/concept/demos but atm I'm working on improving my albums Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
SHALLOW 16,386 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 cute. i like the backing vocals "Na Na" Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Avenues 4,370 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 Omg its great I love the chorus "Don't call my phone" line among the chorus sounds a little icky to me Edit : Its really catchy! I'm still bopping Ouch, My back hurts. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
IAmNotHere1997 25,824 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 Omg I love this . I really like the instrumental, it's giving me some drag-queens-music vibes. The lyrics could have been better, but they're still good for a catchy-dance song made for dancing , not for crying. Overall issa yes, 8/10. Congratulations . Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
datlastfam 5,090 Posted November 11, 2017 Share Posted November 11, 2017 Oh wow a bop Na Na Im not your boy Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Author Share Posted November 11, 2017 1 hour ago, HYPODERMIC0 said: cute. i like the backing vocals "Na Na" thank you!! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Author Share Posted November 11, 2017 1 hour ago, Avenues said: Omg its great I love the chorus "Don't call my phone" line among the chorus sounds a little icky to me Edit : Its really catchy! I'm still bopping ohh thankks btw I might change the "Don't call my phone" part Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Author Share Posted November 11, 2017 8 hours ago, gabrielflorin01 said: Omg I love this . I really like the instrumental, it's giving me some drag-queens-music vibes. The lyrics could have been better, but they're still good for a catchy-dance song made for dancing , not for crying. Overall issa yes, 8/10. Congratulations . thank you so much!!! Though it's not finished I have still to work on it Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 11, 2017 Author Share Posted November 11, 2017 8 hours ago, datlastfam said: Oh wow a bop Na Na Im not your boy you got it ahahah thank you sis Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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