Jjang 2,262 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 What was your goal? I really like it. It's serious and fun at the same time. This. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
hausofmike 127 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 You should create 1 thread and post them all into 1 thread Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saint Laurent 4,862 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 This. I think you're confused. I wasn't talking about it being too fun or too serious. It's just the grammar work that I was talking about. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonnaDiana 0 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 This is not a troll thread I actually do write, and I want to share this with you all, and Jjang I loved yours about to comment soon, thinking about being you for halloween! no seriously I respect your writing prowess! My Heart (Ricochets) Verse 1: My emotions are weak I’m about to break free Set my body alight and release My feelings aren’t strong I am hiding under sea Searching for the one who will bring me back to safety. Pre Chorus: You said your words Now I’m left for dead We’re no longer one Separated at the threads Chorus (x2) My heart ricochet’s into pieces And Breaks through my flesh My heart ricochets into pieces And freezes in the air (Post Chorus) My heart ricochets into pieces And leaves my body dead Verse 2: I am a remnant of emotion A stolen endless dream A bottle with a message A ricochet of heat I’m a force of the unknown And a battle that just won I sit here by myself And wait for your return You said your words Now I’m left for dead We’re no longer one Separated at the threads My heart ricochet’s into pieces And Breaks through my flesh My heart ricochets into pieces And freezes in the air My heart ricochets into pieces And leaves my body dead Our hearts are not our own We are broken and damaged Our voices don’t sing songs They speak a different language We can’t show our reflection No soul left for salvage Our eyes have no perception We are fragile, but we’ll manage My heart ricochet’s into pieces And Breaks through my flesh My heart ricochets into pieces And freezes in the air My heart ricochet’s into pieces And Breaks through my flesh My heart ricochets into pieces And leaves my body dead You said your words Now I’m left for dead We’re no longer one Separated at the threads My heart ricochets into pieces And leaves my body dead Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonnaDiana 0 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 ****IGN LOVED IT! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Didymus 34,379 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 I don't really get it. I thought it started out as a feel-good song and then it turned so.. sad. Do you mind sharing what your goal was? :) Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jjang 2,262 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 I think you're confused. I wasn't talking about it being too fun or too serious. It's just the grammar work that I was talking about. Exactly,It's supposed not to make sense,Grammar,Weird choice of words,Because it's my world you're stepping in to. It's supposed not to be taken seriously yet seriously in the same time,I can't explain it. But OK,I'll improve my grammar next time! :) Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ellie Sioux 8 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Aw, I like it gurl! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jjang 2,262 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 (edited) ****IGN LOVED IT! I ****ing love you too You should create 1 thread and post them all into 1 thread I need all the attention i can get when i post something,Because i want reactions and i'm proud of it,Happy? It will eventually get merged like the other threads of mine. OMG this is amazing, im so proud of u :emo: :clap: You're so supportive *hugs&kisses* Aw, I like it gurl! Thanks gurl!! Edited February 27, 2013 by Jjang Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
inuborg 4,135 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Where's the rhyme tho :kyle: I root for you. I love you. You, you, you, you. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarryTheSequins 976 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 I love the line 'we are fragile, but we'll manage' Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
hausofmike 127 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 (edited) :lmao: the thread title Edited February 27, 2013 by HausOfMike Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jjang 2,262 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 It's amazing amazing amazing ! ! ! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
inuborg 4,135 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 It seems like you like writing songs, join the next season of Platinum Hit, starting next month Also, Why Is Every Word Is Capitalized? :duck: I root for you. I love you. You, you, you, you. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jjang 2,262 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 It seems like you like writing songs, join the next season of Platinum Hit, starting next month Also, Why Is Every Word Is Capitalized? 1) I have been told a lot-Thanks! 2) I Like To Annoy People Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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