Blue Dream 11 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 I don't often share things I write, but I feel like getting some feedback. Check the spoiler. Lucas Lucas, Lucas Sees right through us With his blue-grey startle eyes Lucas, Lucas Does things to us He packs his bags every night And when he cries Philosophizes He turns the oceans into stars, oh {Chorus} He's a roamer He's God He's Satan He's all I need He's a player He's gone He's lonely And he is me {End of chorus} Lucas, Lucas Lover, Brutus He tries so hard to be sane Lucas, Lucas Holy Judas Breath and touch and life's a game And when he dies Or baptizes He melts into his shaky arms, oh {Repeat chorus} He's incense ashes Sweat and passion Loosed out like a sleeping flame He's ammunition Lost ambition Gunman with a shaky aim Searches for happy Searches for meaning Doesn't he know it stops life from living? Oh. {Repeat chorus} Lucas, Lucas Lucas, Lucas Lucas, Lucas Lucas, Lucas Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Logan 20,725 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 We have some good writers on GGD :yes: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ray of Light 8,134 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 What I like about them, is that I could see these on the radio some day :) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Dream 11 Posted February 14, 2013 Author Share Posted February 14, 2013 We have some good writers on GGD What I like about them, is that I could see these on the radio some day :) Aww. Thanks guys. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
windzo 765 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 I like them alot. although in my head in sounded like some kinda dance pop track mainly because i was listening to a dance track so i imagine some spoken word kind of vocal then some high ones with a good beat aside from that (which you might be intend a whole different genre kind of music) I did like the lyrics on their own. :yes: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rei 1 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 record a melody :D cause right now the melody in my head playing is "Love Me by Justin Bieber" where "love me love me" is "lucas lucas" o____o Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Dream 11 Posted February 14, 2013 Author Share Posted February 14, 2013 I like them alot. although in my head in sounded like some kinda dance pop track mainly because i was listening to a dance track so i imagine some spoken word kind of vocal then some high ones with a good beat aside from that (which you might be intend a whole different genre kind of music) I did like the lyrics on their own. record a melody :D cause right now the melody in my head playing is "Love Me by Justin Bieber" where "love me love me" is "lucas lucas" o____o Haha. That's funny that you guys both picture it dance-y. I'm awful at coming up with melodies. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
PopReaper 2,231 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 It's a great lyric! I imagine it with a Spectrum/Shake It Out/Never Let Me Go instrumentals/background Fun Fact: The K in KPop stands for "Kate Bush" Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
windzo 765 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 It's a great lyric! I imagine it with a Spectrum/Shake It Out/Never Let Me Go instrumentals/background that can be amazing Haha. That's funny that you guys both picture it dance-y. I'm awful at coming up with melodies. thats mostly because I listen to alot of dance-y tracks I love to dance :Jase: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Dream 11 Posted February 14, 2013 Author Share Posted February 14, 2013 that can be amazing thats mostly because I listen to alot of dance-y tracks I love to dance Fair enough gurl. It's a great lyric! I imagine it with a Spectrum/Shake It Out/Never Let Me Go instrumentals/background Spectrum would be too dope. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
MetalHausOfJosh 0 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 Slay :Jase: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShadowM 3 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 I loved the lyrics. They're so good :legend: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Dream 11 Posted February 14, 2013 Author Share Posted February 14, 2013 Slay :Jase: I loved the lyrics. They're so good Thanks Homies Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Urban 9 Posted February 14, 2013 Share Posted February 14, 2013 Sounds awesome inspired me to do some writing Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Dream 11 Posted February 14, 2013 Author Share Posted February 14, 2013 Sounds awesome inspired me to do some writing Well that's cool Hun Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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