My new album - Debut Heartbreak Record - out now!

[Guillaume Hamon 6,513]

I love concept album telling you a whole story step after step and I found this one great!  

The only song I believe the lyrics could have been worked on a bit more is "Reliable".

The "solace in you" lyrics are really nice!   I nearly cried listening/ reading to "I'll still love you".  These 1 tracks must be my favorite ones. ^^

"Never raise your hopes too high, cos it's the hope that kills you every time" is an excellent line.

PS: I understand if you don't see yourself singing it but maybe you could get someone to sing it to see what it gives. Or you do sing it then autotune it so there's no pitch issues.  Also your very heartfelt and the robotic vocals could bring an interesting contrast like with some Kannye songs for example. Just an idea since I don't think it's expensive anymore to get standard studio effects.

Spoiler

I took the habit to follow the "day by day" rythme with men.Most of them run away as soon as they feel they gonna be in a situation where they can't really run away anymore. They love it as carefree as possible and often simply don't like the idea of sticking with someone cause it's not freedom for them. I'm a man yet I adapted to it cause I was just making them runaway while I was there wishing for more lol. It often does that, you're far to be alone.

 

[Chic 20,830]

My notifications have been very screwy lately and when I looked through them again I saw that you mentioned me in this! Oh my gosh. I'm so happy you posted all these songs. I'm really proud of your progression in songwriting, you've definitely got a talent in expressing your emotions with words. This has all been a joy to read and I love how the melodies are clear because of the songs you posted along with them! There are some songs I really love on here and I think your lyrics are better than a good amount of the original lyrics.

"You owe me more than this." is a powerful line that I really love. I'm reeeeally feeling Darling Angel too. The passion and pain in Alone is heartbreaking, and you can really see the progression of your last few years in these songs. I'm going to be looking at them more in depth later but...wow, this is a gift to read :)

[StrawberryBlond 14,880]

On 5/21/2020 at 4:37 PM, Chic said:

My notifications have been very screwy lately and when I looked through them again I saw that you mentioned me in this! Oh my gosh. I'm so happy you posted all these songs. I'm really proud of your progression in songwriting, you've definitely got a talent in expressing your emotions with words. This has all been a joy to read and I love how the melodies are clear because of the songs you posted along with them! There are some songs I really love on here and I think your lyrics are better than a good amount of the original lyrics.

"You owe me more than this." is a powerful line that I really love. I'm reeeeally feeling Darling Angel too. The passion and pain in Alone is heartbreaking, and you can really see the progression of your last few years in these songs. I'm going to be looking at them more in depth later but...wow, this is a gift to read

I should've replied to this at the time but just forgot. I wondered why you weren't responding. I thought maybe you were just super busy or going through a hard time and didn't have the energy for it right now but your complete silence without so much as saying that you'd get to it later was weird, especially when I saw you were still around making posts elsewhere. I feared you'd seen something I'd said that had made you hate me! Seeing as you were one of the people I wanted feedback from the most, I was more than a little concerned.

Thanks so much for this great feedback so far. I didn't actually expect anyone to say some of my lyrics were better. While that wasn't the aim, it's certainly a great compliment. I partly responded in case no one else posted and it would lead to a double post situation. I hope this doesn't end up locked!