Abramovic 1,652 Posted February 3, 2018 Author Share Posted February 3, 2018 5 hours ago, Ziggy said: I think it sounds really good, but the "grindr boy" lyric feels...out of place. I know it's a dance track, but you have a really melodic production and name-dropping a social app immediately time stamps the song and makes it feel a little cheaper especially with the delivery you give the lyric. Melody is good, the rest of the lyrics are fine, it's just that couplet that gives me reservations. Otherwise I think it's very nicely done and you sound good as well! Thank you for the feedback! Yes I agree the song sounds trashy especially because of the title... I was just curious to have some feedback and I am really thankful that the song is in general likeable! I‘m working on my debut EP at the moment and I promise that this will be more serious and much more emotional! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sailor 3,321 Posted February 4, 2018 Share Posted February 4, 2018 I kind of like this but I have some ideas that might help you (I also make music, but I don't post it here 'cause reasons ). It's a song about Grindr boys, right? Why not add in some sounds of Skype notifications or chat bubble sounds to emphasise that? Doesn't have to be melodic. Maybe something in the pre-chorus? I also felt like this was building up to something orgasmic, and it kind of didn't. Overall I give it a 7/10 It's good. bannedT for life and it's SAD Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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