NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 15 minutes ago, MrA said: I don't know if you remember but we talked about one song you posted some time ago. You're making a lot of progress tbh I would bop to this. AND I LOVE THE CHORUS (specially the piano) Thank you for being here once again to listen to me, and to comment. It means a lot Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BeIIadonna 5,480 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 2 minutes ago, MrA said: I don't even know what Kebabs & Austria means sis Sorry for not being useful lol Ohhh yep far off Koji & Asia Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hades 27,980 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 I'll check it later. I have to feed my kitten first. But i have listened to some of your demos if i am not mistaken. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 30 minutes ago, Princess Stache said: I can relate. Lyrics are good, production is good, I feel like you may do better in the vocal department if you rap a bit more and sound a bit less monotone. If you want to sound more robotic I feel like some more vocal effects could be used. But overall I really like your song and these critiques are not meant to be negative, just constructive! Thank you for your advice, and especially this one in bold, I think its relevant!! I know I could give more when I sing, but I actually dont want my parents or my neighbors to hear me But I do appreciate these constructive comments and I agree with it!! I'm gonna work on it thank you also for the kind things you said Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 3 minutes ago, Hades said: I'll check it later. I have to feed my kitten first. But i have listened to some of your demos if i am not mistaken. thank you bro, tell me later what you think about it! You might have listened to some of my demos since I share some of them here quite regularly! Bon appétit to your kitten Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
luftikuzzz 2,492 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Wow, Great song! Good job! only criticism: try to use a little less autotune in some parts. you have a good voice, the effect makes it cool but sometimes your voice goes down. maybe we can collaborate sometime?! I am also singing and producing Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 1 minute ago, Enceladus said: only criticism: try to use a little less autotune in some parts. you have a good voice, the effect makes it cool but sometimes your voice goes down. Thank you for listening and commenting. I'm often told that I use too much autotune, but I definitely think that my voice sounds better with it 1 minute ago, Enceladus said: maybe we can collaborate sometime?! I am also singing and producing anytime honey!!! dm me Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
luftikuzzz 2,492 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Just now, NIGHTCRAWLER said: Thank you for listening and commenting. I'm often told that I use too much autotune, but I definitely think that my voice sounds better with it anytime honey!!! dm me Be confident! You have a good potential in your voice I‘ll dm you tomorrow, I‘m going sleep now Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 1 minute ago, Enceladus said: Be confident! You have a good potential in your voice I‘ll dm you tomorrow, I‘m going sleep now aww thank you see you tomo' then Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
PerfectGUY 7,822 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 1 hour ago, NIGHTCRAWLER said: Hide contents Lyrics: That is how life goes Didnt mama tell you you Work hard that's the key to live Brought up like a race horse Be wise and be useful Do not live your fantasy I've been working working working To make them more money Working working working For them and not for me Working working working The pain you don't know it Working working working I do it if I want to Without us you get as poor Dont you try to stand in my shoes I got an human body We're not yet technology Why not people before money All my money goes to the ones that never sweat **** the social ladder What the hell we're fooled And y’all don’t care I bet I'm caught up till the day I die I've been working working working To make them more money Working working working For them and not for me Working working working The pain you don't know it Working working working I do it if I want to Without us you get as poor Dont you try to stand in my shoes I got an human body We're not yet technology Why not people before money Scam Scam I do it if I want to Without us you get as poor Dont you try to stand in my shoes I got an human body We're not yet technology Why not people before money Mélenchon teas but great song Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hades 27,980 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 My fave part apart from the instrumental is ''I'm working working working i do it if i want to and the isntrumental at 2:00 slays. Honestly that beat around 2:00 puts the Cure to shame. With less autotune at some parts it's a banger. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 16, 2017 Author Share Posted November 16, 2017 8 hours ago, PerfectGUY said: Mélenchon teas but great song you killed me Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 16, 2017 Author Share Posted November 16, 2017 8 hours ago, Hades said: My fave part apart from the instrumental is ''I'm working working working i do it if i want to and the isntrumental at 2:00 slays. Honestly that beat around 2:00 puts the Cure to shame. With less autotune at some parts it's a banger. thank's bro and I take note of your advice Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lazarus 425 Posted November 16, 2017 Share Posted November 16, 2017 I actually like the instrumental, it has a very robotic, nocturnal sound. As far as vocals go, though, you have potential! Since I think that since it's clear you'd like to improve that vocal element, you might try working multiple layers of vocals together, rather than using AutoTune - Think the way that Taylor uses this trick, on the majority of her recent music. It gives her voice more breadth- Combining multiple layers of the main pitch with a few low and high pitch takes to create a very full effect, regardless of her actual vocal prowess in the song, if that makes sense. A lot of singers use this idea professionally, and it can teach you a lot. Overall though, lots of improvement over previous demos I've heard from you and lots of potential. ugh Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
TimisaMonster 31,073 Posted November 16, 2017 Share Posted November 16, 2017 The instrumental is a bop The vocals are ok, but the heavy autotune effect doesn't help The lyrics are ok, but the chorus is understandable. The verses seems to not be as cohesive story wise to carry one train of thought Overall, great effort and it is pretty relatable as well for everyone Stream my new single, 💜"Heartbeat"💜, on Spotify! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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