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NIGHTCRAWLER

Hey Monsters!

Tonight, I'm sharing a song that I produced quite a long ago. I worked on it a lot to make it as clean as possible considering I dont have any professional material.

Well, I wrote this one during the darkest period in my life. It's part of my 4th album "blinded" that I wrote when my depression was in its climax. Actually, I used to work at McDonalds and study at the same time, and I've been doing that during a long time and I was sleeping like 4 hours a night during a really long period and my body just couldn't make it. I didn't go to school anymore and well... I've been into a lot of troubles in the same period but this song only focus on the working part. Then, writing my album really helped me to get through. Also I started to sleep more and work less and it was slowly getting better. Now I quitted to focus on my studies. 

This song has a second part that it's called "Overdose", which I'm probably gonna share it soon or later.

Spoiler

 

Lyrics:

That is how life goes
Didnt mama tell you you
Work hard that's the key to live

Brought up like a race horse 
Be wise and be useful
Do not live your fantasy

I've been working working working
To make them more money

Working working working 
For them and
 not for me
Working working working
The pain you don't know it
Working working working

I do it if I want to
Without us you get as poor
Dont you try to stand in my shoes

I got an human body
We're not yet technology
Why not people before money

All my money goes to
the ones that never sweat 
**** the social ladder

What the hell we're fooled
And y’all don’t care I bet
I'm caught up till the day I die

I've been working working working
To make them more money

Working working working 
For them and
 not for me
Working working working
The pain you don't know it
Working working working

I do it if I want to
Without us you get as poor
Dont you try to stand in my shoes

I got an human body
We're not yet technology
Why not people before money

Scam
Scam

I do it if I want to
Without us you get as poor
Dont you try to stand in my shoes

I got an human body
We're not yet technology
Why not people before money

 

Any advice? Thanks for listening :hug:

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Drin Lon

Your songwriting is actually not bad at all, the melodies are great and catchy tbh despite the vocal effect :golfclap:

The production is also nice :music:

Slay sis :rockstar:

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Princess Stache

I can relate.  Lyrics are good, production is good, I feel like you may do better in the vocal department if you rap a bit more and sound a bit less monotone.  If you want to sound more robotic I feel like some more vocal effects could be used.  But overall I really like your song and these critiques are not meant to be negative, just constructive! :)

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1 minute ago, Princess Stache said:

I can relate.  Lyrics are good, production is good, I feel like you may do better in the vocal department if you rap a bit more and sound a bit less monotone.  If you want to sound more robotic I feel like some more vocal effects could be used.  But overall I really like your song and these critiques are not meant to be negative, just constructive! :)

True the song would get even better in my opinion if you changed the vocal effect

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I don't know if you remember but we talked about one song you posted some time ago. You're making a lot of progress tbh I would bop to this. AND I LOVE THE CHORUS (specially the piano) :giveup:

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BeIIadonna
Just now, MrA said:

I don't know if you remember but we talked about one song you posted some time ago. You're making a lot of progress tbh I would bop to this. AND I LOVE THE CHORUS (specially the piano) :giveup:

You were exposed :selena:

Anyways what was Kabab & Austira??

(Im far off from what they were actually aren't it?? :giggle:)

 

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NIGHTCRAWLER
17 minutes ago, MonsterGaga5555 said:

Instrumental: Killer!

Vocals: Alot better!!

Final Rating: 9

Too be better:

No clue 

thanks you sis :hug: your opinion is special to me

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NIGHTCRAWLER
17 minutes ago, Drin Lon said:

Your songwriting is actually not bad at all, the melodies are great and catchy tbh despite the vocal effect :golfclap:

The production is also nice :music:

Slay sis :rockstar:

thank you man for taking the time to listen and to comment, amazing people here on GGD:firega:

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NIGHTCRAWLER
17 minutes ago, kyanewest said:

I've never related to a song more than this one :selena:

I know I might not be the only one... That's what I love about my album Blinded. I think it can be a sort of antidote for some mental instabilities, at least it has been for me. I'm still working hard (especially the lyrics) on a song that I'm really looking forward to show to y'all, because I know that many people here have mental issues (so do I) and this song literally saved me from committing suicide #EvilCanDie

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7 minutes ago, MonsterGaga5555 said:

You were exposed :selena:

Anyways what was Kabab & Austira??

(Im far off from what they were actually aren't it?? :giggle:)

 

Is that question for me though? I'm confused :selena:

And yeah you could join the farewell party I'm hosting Sunday night if you want 

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BeIIadonna
Just now, MrA said:

Is that question for me though? I'm confused :selena:

And yeah you could join the farewell party I'm hosting Sunday night if you want 

Yeah in the exposed thread :poot: 

You send something about Kebabs & Austria?? 

Im far off aren't i :selena: 

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1 minute ago, MonsterGaga5555 said:

Yeah in the exposed thread :poot: 

You send something about Kebabs & Austria?? 

Im far off aren't i :selena: 

I don't even know what Kebabs & Austria means sis :awkney:

Sorry for not being useful lol 

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BeIIadonna
Just now, MrA said:

I don't even know what Kebabs & Austria means sis :awkney:

Sorry for not being useful lol 

Idk :ladyhaha:

Im defiantly far off im going to re-read what the exposed thread said :kara:

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