NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Hey Monsters! Tonight, I'm sharing a song that I produced quite a long ago. I worked on it a lot to make it as clean as possible considering I dont have any professional material. Well, I wrote this one during the darkest period in my life. It's part of my 4th album "blinded" that I wrote when my depression was in its climax. Actually, I used to work at McDonalds and study at the same time, and I've been doing that during a long time and I was sleeping like 4 hours a night during a really long period and my body just couldn't make it. I didn't go to school anymore and well... I've been into a lot of troubles in the same period but this song only focus on the working part. Then, writing my album really helped me to get through. Also I started to sleep more and work less and it was slowly getting better. Now I quitted to focus on my studies. This song has a second part that it's called "Overdose", which I'm probably gonna share it soon or later. Spoiler Lyrics: That is how life goes Didnt mama tell you you Work hard that's the key to live Brought up like a race horse Be wise and be useful Do not live your fantasy I've been working working working To make them more money Working working working For them and not for me Working working working The pain you don't know it Working working working I do it if I want to Without us you get as poor Dont you try to stand in my shoes I got an human body We're not yet technology Why not people before money All my money goes to the ones that never sweat **** the social ladder What the hell we're fooled And y’all don’t care I bet I'm caught up till the day I die I've been working working working To make them more money Working working working For them and not for me Working working working The pain you don't know it Working working working I do it if I want to Without us you get as poor Dont you try to stand in my shoes I got an human body We're not yet technology Why not people before money Scam Scam I do it if I want to Without us you get as poor Dont you try to stand in my shoes I got an human body We're not yet technology Why not people before money Any advice? Thanks for listening Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BeIIadonna 5,480 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Instrumental: Killer! Vocals: Alot better!! Final Rating: 9 Too be better: No clue Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Drin Lon 7,875 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Your songwriting is actually not bad at all, the melodies are great and catchy tbh despite the vocal effect The production is also nice Slay sis Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 I've never related to a song more than this one Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess Stache 2,066 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 I can relate. Lyrics are good, production is good, I feel like you may do better in the vocal department if you rap a bit more and sound a bit less monotone. If you want to sound more robotic I feel like some more vocal effects could be used. But overall I really like your song and these critiques are not meant to be negative, just constructive! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 1 minute ago, Princess Stache said: I can relate. Lyrics are good, production is good, I feel like you may do better in the vocal department if you rap a bit more and sound a bit less monotone. If you want to sound more robotic I feel like some more vocal effects could be used. But overall I really like your song and these critiques are not meant to be negative, just constructive! True the song would get even better in my opinion if you changed the vocal effect Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ada 1,665 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 I don't know if you remember but we talked about one song you posted some time ago. You're making a lot of progress tbh I would bop to this. AND I LOVE THE CHORUS (specially the piano) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BeIIadonna 5,480 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Just now, MrA said: I don't know if you remember but we talked about one song you posted some time ago. You're making a lot of progress tbh I would bop to this. AND I LOVE THE CHORUS (specially the piano) You were exposed Anyways what was Kabab & Austira?? (Im far off from what they were actually aren't it?? ) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 17 minutes ago, MonsterGaga5555 said: Instrumental: Killer! Vocals: Alot better!! Final Rating: 9 Too be better: No clue thanks you sis your opinion is special to me Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 17 minutes ago, Drin Lon said: Your songwriting is actually not bad at all, the melodies are great and catchy tbh despite the vocal effect The production is also nice Slay sis thank you man for taking the time to listen and to comment, amazing people here on GGD Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
NIGHTCRAWLER 6,985 Posted November 15, 2017 Author Share Posted November 15, 2017 17 minutes ago, kyanewest said: I've never related to a song more than this one I know I might not be the only one... That's what I love about my album Blinded. I think it can be a sort of antidote for some mental instabilities, at least it has been for me. I'm still working hard (especially the lyrics) on a song that I'm really looking forward to show to y'all, because I know that many people here have mental issues (so do I) and this song literally saved me from committing suicide #EvilCanDie Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ada 1,665 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 7 minutes ago, MonsterGaga5555 said: You were exposed Anyways what was Kabab & Austira?? (Im far off from what they were actually aren't it?? ) Is that question for me though? I'm confused And yeah you could join the farewell party I'm hosting Sunday night if you want Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BeIIadonna 5,480 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Just now, MrA said: Is that question for me though? I'm confused And yeah you could join the farewell party I'm hosting Sunday night if you want Yeah in the exposed thread You send something about Kebabs & Austria?? Im far off aren't i Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ada 1,665 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 1 minute ago, MonsterGaga5555 said: Yeah in the exposed thread You send something about Kebabs & Austria?? Im far off aren't i I don't even know what Kebabs & Austria means sis Sorry for not being useful lol Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BeIIadonna 5,480 Posted November 15, 2017 Share Posted November 15, 2017 Just now, MrA said: I don't even know what Kebabs & Austria means sis Sorry for not being useful lol Idk Im defiantly far off im going to re-read what the exposed thread said Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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