REALITY 75,378 Posted October 16, 2017 Share Posted October 16, 2017 So, I don't know if this is even the right section, so hopefully this doesn't get moved But anyways to the topic at hand: I've always been into poetry. I love coming up with poems and even though I use to draw and paint a lot, I've recently (well, relatively recently) been getting into music into a more theoretical level. I love music and I want to learn more about it and hopefully one day produce a song or two, however, I wanted to take my talents (or at least, what I think are my talents) and transform them into making a song. I don't know if these are really any good, or if their generic, if they're garbage, or if they're amazing. So, I just wanted to get a few opinions on them. I make a reference to Gaga in one of them, so... Hopefully you guys like them, and please, I'd like to get any constructive criticisms you guys may have on them. Thanks in advance! **PS: No, I have not even come up with melodies for them, these are strictly just lyrics** Perfect Fantasy: Spoiler Perfect Fantasy  Verse 1 Didnât tell me that you loved me, It didnât fuel the beast inside, Like a sailor, Iâm lost at sea, When I watched you part of me died, It felt different, you and I, And when no one else is around, I could just stare at you, Not making a sound  Pre-chorus You knock me off my feet, Something tells me weâre not done, Every moment with you, so sweet Something tells me youâre the one  Chrous Wanted a kiss, Your smile is something I miss, Get out of my head, And into my bed, Take me away, Lead me astray, Itâs not blasphemy, But a perfect fantasy, (A perfect fantasy) (A perfect fantasy)  Verse 2 Time after time thought you were mine, The way you touch me on my leg, Iâll wait three years, no, six, no, nine, Livinâ in a tough powder keg, Canât fathom life without you, And when I do, it hurts too much, Itâs our last year, donât leave, Forgetting that touch  Pre-chorus You knock me off my feet, Something tells me weâre not done, Every moment with you, so sweet Something tells me youâre the one  Chrous Wanted a kiss, Your smile is something I miss, Get out of my head, And into my bed, Take me away, Lead me astray, Itâs not blasphemy, But a perfect fantasy, (A perfect fantasy) (A perfect fantasy)  Bridge Have I run out of time? Would it matter anyway? Seeing you happy with her, Is both a blessing and a curse, Not trying to be selfish, Just entertaining a thought, Not wanting to let you go, But is it worth a shot?  Final Chorus Wanted a kiss, Your smile is something I miss, Get out of my head, And into my bed, Take me away, Lead me astray, Itâs not blasphemy, But a perfect fantasy, (A perfect fantasy) (A perfect fantasy) Lead me to a perfect fantasy  Three and a Half Minutes: Spoiler Three and a Half Minutes  Verse 1 A new place, a new dimension, The beat of a drum, gaining all my attention, I was living in a broken home, In my head, running away from Rome, The chords provide harmony, It takes me worlds away, And for a moment my world doesnât look like an ashtray  Pre-chorus Five foot two, and still mean, Can write a song and still make a scene, Situation so dire, The melody is something that inspires  Chorus Taken away to a better place, Put in a better mind, Only takes three and a half minutes, To make me work past my limits, Only takes three and a half minutes, To make me work past my limits  Verse 2 Lie in bed and dance back and forth, Let the music move you, hear the voice in the mic, With your leather and your boots with spikes, Block the shouting and the fear, Dancinâ hours on end, Looking at the mirror on the ceiling and my arms extend  Pre-chorus Five foot two, and still mean, Can write a song and still make a scene, Situation so dire, The melody is something that inspires  Chorus Taken away to a better place, Put in a better mind, Only takes three and a half minutes, To make me work past my limits, Only takes three and a half minutes, To make me work past my limits  Bridge Not seven minutes in Heaven, Or his late night sessions, Compare to the sound in my ears, They can make me laugh or make me cry, Leaving me in tears, Tossing and turning, Slippinâ and slidinâ, And for a moment Iâm gliding  Final Chorus Taken away to a better place, Put in a better mind, Only takes three and a half minutes, To make me work past my limits, Only takes three and a half minutes, To make me work past my limits, Stay for a few, Leave never, It only takes three and a half minutes, To get lost forever   Angels are Aliens: Spoiler Angels are Aliens  Verse 1 Trusted you like a brother, You know some people have real problems, You and I were something, another, You are totally foreign, You might has well have moved away, You know I am not someone to betray  Pre-chorus Cut the bullshit, Youâre nothing but a hypocrite, You werenât there, And it wasnât fair  Chorus Angels are aliens, Theyâre people in disguise, They earn your trust, And look you straight in the eyes, Angels are aliens, People unknown, Angels are aliens, Theyâre not beautiful gemstones  Verse 2 You were suppose to be there, Helping me out, saving me from them, Not looking like a total stranger, When their friend is in danger, Trust is like a broken mirror, When you get nearer, it gets clearer  Pre-chorus Cut the bullshit, Youâre nothing but a hypocrite, You werenât there, And it wasnât fair  Chorus Angels are aliens, Theyâre people in disguise, They earn your trust, And look you straight in the eyes, Angels are aliens, People unknown, Angels are aliens, Theyâre not beautiful gemstones  Bridge I was naive like a little kid, And maybe for a second, You werenât an illusion, But timeâs up I reckon, When the going gets tough, The tough get going  Final chorus Angels are aliens, Theyâre people in disguise, In disguise, They earn your trust, And look you straight in the eyes, Angels are aliens, Angels are aliens, People unknown, Angels are aliens, Theyâre not beautiful gemstones   đŠ đ§ââïžđ„đžđđ»đșđ§đđâïžđȘđ€đșđ±đ Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tom Nook 37,805 Posted October 16, 2017 Share Posted October 16, 2017 I like the first two I get Lorde vibes also that Five Foot Two reference  I think Angels are Aliens could be better itâs a little amateurish Uh Red Wine... Convict... Gah Gah... Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
REALITY 75,378 Posted October 16, 2017 Author Share Posted October 16, 2017 Just now, Gardevoir said: I like the first two I get Lorde vibes also that Five Foot Two reference  I think Angels are Aliens could be better itâs a little amateurish That's good I wrote AAA in like 15 minutes just cause I was bored today and I wanted something to do  What part specifically could use work? đŠ đ§ââïžđ„đžđđ»đșđ§đđâïžđȘđ€đșđ±đ Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trepadation 5,566 Posted October 16, 2017 Share Posted October 16, 2017 Sounds like lana lyrics except their isn't a month, daddy, money, americana, or cars. If you add those things you can ghost write for her Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tom Nook 37,805 Posted October 16, 2017 Share Posted October 16, 2017 1 minute ago, M Monstre said: That's good I wrote AAA in like 15 minutes just cause I was bored today and I wanted something to do  What part specifically could use work? The pre-chorus is a little blunt, and when going gets tough in the bridge sounds corny but 15 minutes is still impressive Uh Red Wine... Convict... Gah Gah... Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
PeterPan 0 Posted October 16, 2017 Share Posted October 16, 2017 its better than anything I wrote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
REALITY 75,378 Posted October 16, 2017 Author Share Posted October 16, 2017 17 minutes ago, Gardevoir said: The pre-chorus is a little blunt, and when going gets tough in the bridge sounds corny but 15 minutes is still impressive I rewrote the verses (cause now looking back at it, they really weren't that good) and the prechorus as well as the bridge. Hopefully this is better???? Spoiler Angels are Aliens  Verse 1 I trusted you with all my heart, Led me to heaven right from the start, Looking down up on the clouds, Took me in your arms, Your charisma was your charm, But then you took me by surprise, Spoiled the good wine, And left me to die  Pre-chorus I see through your bullshit, See through your facade, Iâm not here so you can benefit, Youâre no god  Chorus Angels are aliens, Theyâre people in disguise, They earn your trust, And look you straight in the eyes, Angels are aliens, People unknown, Angels are aliens, Theyâre not beautiful gemstones  Verse 2 You left me crying in the rain, Took me into the sky to your ship, Leavinâ me like a stranger, Your friend, in danger, Trust is a broken mirror, When you get nearer, itâs clearer, Light from above, But it ainât no dove Pre-chorus I see through your bullshit, See through your facade, Iâm not here so you can benefit, Youâre no god  Chorus Angels are aliens, Theyâre people in disguise, They earn your trust, And look you straight in the eyes, Angels are aliens, People unknown, Angels are aliens, Theyâre not beautiful gemstones  Bridge For a second, You werenât an illusion, But timeâs up I reckon, All the lies you gave, And the broken promises you made, I was on my knees and prayed, That this was just another lie, Cause deep down, I didn't want to say goodbye  Final chorus Angels are aliens, Theyâre people in disguise, In disguise, They earn your trust, And look you straight in the eyes, Angels are aliens, Angels are aliens, People unknown, Angels are aliens, Theyâre not beautiful gemstones   đŠ đ§ââïžđ„đžđđ»đșđ§đđâïžđȘđ€đșđ±đ Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stevo 629 Posted October 16, 2017 Share Posted October 16, 2017 Lana is shook Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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