garnite 8 Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 i wrote a song it's called voiceless it's for my mother whose liver's all messed upi shan't acknowledge the words you spokewhen the room was bare, bar usyou raised your hands at my demandsyou didn't understandi shan't acknowledge your sullen glanceyour buddy holly starewith your tobacco myth, your thin mid-riftand your flowing locks of hairi ponder our ability to remedy what ails you...and if i find out that your words are see through...my voice will fly away, dear christ! i am now voicelessi am now voiceless, really voicelessand my heart is just as dim, dear christ! i am now voicelessquite voicelessand i know that i am clinically disabledbut i couldn't even sing before, my babies!put a glass to break all the happy peopleall of the happy peopleDATS ALL IVE GOT AND I WANT UR OPINIONS IF U DONT LIKE IT DONT SAY ANYTHING IF U LIKE IT PM ME AND I CAN WORK IT OUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 2 COPIES TO THE FIRST PERSON WHO PMS ME>>>>>by the way, i forgot to say tha Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Urban 9 Posted April 7, 2013 Share Posted April 7, 2013 I just wrote this song, and I really struggled with the chorus, I feel like it's very weak. What do you think? Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nelson Monroe 4 Posted April 7, 2013 Share Posted April 7, 2013 I need songwriting help, anyone available? :P Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bowie 4 Posted April 9, 2013 Share Posted April 9, 2013 I need songwriting help, anyone available? :P If you want some help feel free to send me a PM :) Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted April 10, 2013 Share Posted April 10, 2013 I need songwriting help, anyone available? :P Feel free to PM me. :yes: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DirtyLittleMonster 14 Posted April 12, 2013 Share Posted April 12, 2013 i wrote a song it's called voiceless it's for my mother whose liver's all messed up i shan't acknowledge the words you spoke when the room was bare, bar us you raised your hands at my demands you didn't understand i shan't acknowledge your sullen glance your buddy holly stare with your tobacco myth, your thin mid-rift and your flowing locks of hair i ponder our ability to remedy what ails you... and if i find out that your words are see through... my voice will fly away, dear christ! i am now voiceless i am now voiceless, really voiceless and my heart is just as dim, dear christ! i am now voiceless quite voiceless and i know that i am clinically disabled but i couldn't even sing before, my babies! put a glass to break all the happy people all of the happy people DATS ALL IVE GOT AND I WANT UR OPINIONS IF U DONT LIKE IT DONT SAY ANYTHING IF U LIKE IT PM ME AND I CAN WORK IT OUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 2 COPIES TO THE FIRST PERSON WHO PMS ME>>>>> by the way, i forgot to say tha It doesn't sound like a song more a poem Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Buoy Boy 1 Posted April 14, 2013 Share Posted April 14, 2013 SILENT LOVER Hush hush touch my lips Don’t go in for the kiss Don’t even breathe coz’ there’s nothing more important than this Shh shh nothing to say Just lay quietly and play We don’t need to talk coz’ it’s so much better this way Silence is golden and so is your love We could create ecstasy if we mix them up Sweet sweet silence can speak so loud Scream down the place, drown out the doubt You don’t need to say anything to me; your heartbeat is what I wanna hear You can tell me so much more by the drop of a single tear And when you smile, you can say a thousand words You can be my silent lover, always seen but never heard Hush hush brush my lips With your fingers, the tips The heat of your caress can send me deep into bliss Shh shh what’s to say I could do this all day Push me until I scream inside silently My heart is titanium and so is your hold You got me so tight and you ain’t lettin’ go Grappling my soul and not making a sound All I can hear is your touch in my head and I can’t turn it down You don’t need to say anything to me; your heartbeat is what I wanna hear You can tell me so much more by the drop of a single tear And when you smile, you can say a thousand words You can be my silent lover, always seen but never heard Your voice ringin’ in my ears so I can’t hear the bang Sneaking up on me from behind just because you can And when you push your love gun right into my back You can shoot me all you want, clickety-clack-clack Sneaking up on me from behind, tip-toe oh so quiet But you’re infecting my mind with all the subtlety of a riot Looting my heart like a swashbucklin’ pirate Heatin’ up my body like a Mediterranean climate You don’t need to say anything to me; your heartbeat is what I wanna hear You can tell me so much more by the drop of a single tear And when you smile, you can say a thousand words You can be my silent lover, always seen but never heard Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
SharGaga 2,906 Posted April 14, 2013 Share Posted April 14, 2013 Amazing Really like it! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
GagaOopsy 26 Posted April 14, 2013 Share Posted April 14, 2013 (edited) OMG! That is amazing. I can totally see it being a hit :'). :clap: Edited April 14, 2013 by GagaOopsy Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Molly Aphrodite 241 Posted April 14, 2013 Share Posted April 14, 2013 It doesn't sound like a song more a poem It's a parody of Speechless :toofunny: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThisGuyTony 29,054 Posted April 14, 2013 Share Posted April 14, 2013 SILENT LOVER Hush hush touch my lips Don’t go in for the kiss Don’t even breathe coz’ there’s nothing more important than this Shh shh nothing to say Just lay quietly and play We don’t need to talk coz’ it’s so much better this way Silence is golden and so is your love We could create ecstasy if we mix them up Sweet sweet silence can speak so loud Scream down the place, drown out the doubt You don’t need to say anything to me; your heartbeat is what I wanna hear You can tell me so much more by the drop of a single tear And when you smile, you can say a thousand words You can be my silent lover, always seen but never heard Hush hush brush my lips With your fingers, the tips The heat of your caress can send me deep into bliss Shh shh what’s to say I could do this all day Push me until I scream inside silently My heart is titanium and so is your hold You got me so tight and you ain’t lettin’ go Grappling my soul and not making a sound All I can hear is your touch in my head and I can’t turn it down You don’t need to say anything to me; your heartbeat is what I wanna hear You can tell me so much more by the drop of a single tear And when you smile, you can say a thousand words You can be my silent lover, always seen but never heard Your voice ringin’ in my ears so I can’t hear the bang Sneaking up on me from behind just because you can And when you push your love gun right into my back You can shoot me all you want, clickety-clack-clack Sneaking up on me from behind, tip-toe oh so quiet But you’re infecting my mind with all the subtlety of a riot Looting my heart like a swashbucklin’ pirate Heatin’ up my body like a Mediterranean climate You don’t need to say anything to me; your heartbeat is what I wanna hear You can tell me so much more by the drop of a single tear And when you smile, you can say a thousand words You can be my silent lover, always seen but never heard This ---> "Grappling my soul and not making a soundAll I can hear is your touch in my head and I can’t turn it down" :legend: Also, is there a hidden s-xual meaning? I don't know if that was deliberate or if I'm just dirty minded or something. Lol... xD Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Buoy Boy 1 Posted April 14, 2013 Share Posted April 14, 2013 This ---> "Grappling my soul and not making a sound All I can hear is your touch in my head and I can’t turn it down" :legend: Also, is there a hidden s-xual meaning? I don't know if that was deliberate or if I'm just dirty minded or something. Lol... xD haha it's hardly hidden :P Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rollercoaster 2 Posted April 14, 2013 Share Posted April 14, 2013 I've almost completed work on 30 tracks that I'm planning on either singing on myself (gotta love technology) or getting some vocalists I know to get on there to do vocals, I haven't decided yet. But after that I'm probably going to see who wants to buy my garbage lmao This is something I had in my head all day, rough draft. Something with big toms like Avril's new song or JGMAR When I was young I felt that nothing was impossible When I was young I felt like I could fly When I was young I was so unstoppable When I was young I never used to cry But I know That I'm older now And I'm wiser still Together we can make it out All we have to do is... Throw up out hands like "I'm done with this sh1t" Take every chance like "I'm gonna do it" Shout out, shout out Raise our voices Woah oh oh oh Woah oh oh oh Na na na naa Na na na naa Now that I'm strong I know that nothing's impossible Now that I'm strong I've got something in mind Now that I'm strong I'm feeling super unstoppable Now that I'm strong I'm gonna touch the sky Throw up out hands like "I'm done with this sh1t" Take every chance like "I'm gonna do it" Shout out, shout out Raise our voices Woah oh oh oh Woah oh oh oh Na na na naa Na na na naa When I look back and I see I'm just a vision of me What's inside has withered and died I was young and so dumb Drinking until I'm numb Drinking until I'm numb.. But it was oh. So. Worth it. Throw up out hands like "I'm done with this sh1t" Take every chance like "I'm gonna do it" Shout out, shout out Raise our voices Woah oh oh oh Woah oh oh oh Na na na naa Na na na naa Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
warhol killer 8,543 Posted April 15, 2013 Share Posted April 15, 2013 Verse 1 When the time goes by, Nobody helped you, why? Cause you are feeling so lonely.. As the time goes by, You rejected me, why? Cause you are feeling so ashamed.. Footsteps on the snow, You can't blame me cause your so low.. Guess your sleeping the dark with this love bow.. Footprints in the sand.. You can't blame me cause your not rad, Guess your aren't living in the bright side..Chorus Footsteps On The Snow, You know I really want to know.. How your feeling today with this lonely piece of time.. Are depressed or stressed somehow, Tell me cause I really know how.. How to fix these things with this little left of time.. Your so lovely and cool but now your just Footsteps On The SnowVerse 2 You cannot buy a house in the heavens, You cannot even sleep at 7'.. Cause you are so sad.. Your feeling insecure, So heart is not that pure.. Cause you are so bad and mad.. Footsteps on the snow, You can't blame me cause your so low.. Guess your sleeping the dark with this love bow.. Footprints in the sand.. You can't blame me cause I'm so rad, Guess your aren't living in the bright side..Chorus Footsteps On The Snow, You know I really want to know.. How your feeling today with this lonely piece of time.. Are depressed or stressed somehow, Tell me cause I really know how.. How to fix these things with this little left of time.. Your so lovely and cool but now your just Footsteps On The SnowBridge Easy living, That was what you told me when we were friends.. Give you everything, As a friend you might have not understand.. Footsteps on the snow, Your not ready to go.. Footprints on the wind.. Guess your not living in the light anyway.. Footsteps on the snow, You can't blame me cause your so low.. Guess your sleeping the dark with this love bow.. Footprints in the sand.. You can't blame me cause I'm so rad, Guess your aren't living in the bright side.. Chorus: Footsteps On The Snow, You know I really want to know.. How your feeling today with this lonely piece of time.. Are depressed or stressed somehow, Tell me cause I really know how.. How to fix these things with this little left of time.. Your so lovely and cool but now your just Footsteps On The Snow When the time goes by, Nobody helped you, why? Cause you are feeling so lonely.. You are just prentending by.. FOOTSTEPS ON THE SNOW warhol killer ✴ GAGA¹⁵ Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DORd 60 Posted April 15, 2013 Share Posted April 15, 2013 TIME TO RISE - Release date: April 20! check out this promo! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OSU0j2ZLkks Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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