Averie 4 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Where's the rhyme tho :kyle: Doesn't have to rhyme I like this a lot! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wild 1,296 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Heyyyyy Belladonna your song be good boy!!!!!!! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
inuborg 4,135 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Doesn't have to rhyme I like this a lot! Yes it does, it a song; songs rhyme :duck: I root for you. I love you. You, you, you, you. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
OZZ 6 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 :lmao: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
WarriorPrince 1 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 I love it! I'm also a songwriter, i just think that you should rhyme. Doesn't have to rhyme I like this a lot! It kinda does. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Averie 4 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Yes it does, it a song; songs rhyme I love it! I'm also a songwriter, i just think that you should rhyme. It kinda does. Well okay, yeah I was thinking of this song more as poetry when I read it. :sweat: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jesse Pinkman 4,660 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Yes it does, it a song; songs rhyme Not all songs have to rhyme tho :wtf: It's science, bitch Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonnaDiana 0 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Yes it does, it a song; songs rhyme it rhymes... release and weak rhyme.... its not a full rhyme it is called half rhyme.... Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheProfessor 289 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 UMMM its ok, its more like a poetry though, than a song but, good job :clap: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonnaDiana 0 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Well okay, yeah I was thinking of this song more as poetry when I read it. I am kinda more poetic when I write I do apologise It's amazing amazing amazing ! ! ! thankyou love :D I love the line 'we are fragile, but we'll manage' hehe :D cheers It is one of my favs too Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Averie 4 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 I am kinda more poetic when I write I do apologise Don't apologize! :hug: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jjang 2,262 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 Glad I entertained You :) . Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
inuborg 4,135 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 (edited) it rhymes... release and weak rhyme.... its not a full rhyme it is called half rhyme.... I know what a half rhyme is :) I feel to have a song not rhyme is kinda lazy. Edited February 27, 2013 by inuborg I root for you. I love you. You, you, you, you. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonnaDiana 0 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 I don't really get it. I thought it started out as a feel-good song and then it turned so.. sad. Do you mind sharing what your goal was? :) No probs... well honestly it is how, for me ( notice it is my intrepretation) that sometimes in love we lose ourselves, we fade away..it is about the story teller's personality and themselves but it can be seen as a breakup too... it is multi-facet... ( sorry for the brief-ness I am at work and my boss is skulking around) I know what a half rhyme is :) not suggesting you don't but I actually have rhymed here MAYBE not in Verse 2 I will give you that one... but I have... and no not all song's have to rhyme... or rhyme completly... Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Didymus 34,379 Posted February 27, 2013 Share Posted February 27, 2013 No probs... well honestly it is how, for me ( notice it is my intrepretation) that sometimes in love we lose ourselves, we fade away..it is about the story teller's personality and themselves but it can be seen as a breakup too... it is multi-facet... ( sorry for the brief-ness I am at work and my boss is skulking around) Ooh, okay, I re-read it and I get it now. It's quite beautiful, actually. And of course very relatable. Losing oneself in love is such a beautiful theme and yet you found a way to not make it cheesy. Keep on writin'! :golfclap: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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