Man on the Inside (first part of the Getting in Deep series)

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Man on the Inside

This a work by a long time writer friend of mine, and I found this series back when it was first starting.

It's a sci-fi, spy-esque (would spy be a correct term? I think it is, at least for this) piece of fiction she plans on releasing. This is the start of the second draft, which is much longer than the original on deviantart. I assume the published version is going to be even longer.

Her words on this part of the series:

William James Rowe is a new agent for the Watch, a militant offshoot of the Patent Office that supervises new inventions and potential weaponry. Everything’s going pretty good for him, unless you count the aggravation his coffee-addicted partner, Agent Louis Patriarch, gives him for being a rookie and a geek.

Their first search, seize, and rescue of a Freewill compound informant ends with Will alone. He finds their informant in dire need of medical attention, and Louis is missing. An incident lands Will in quarantine far away from the safety of the Watch base, and it doesn’t take long before he becomes hunted by the remnants of Freewill.

Meanwhile, after a visit from a madman from his past, Louis finds himself in a dark, slimy pit that keeps moving and ratchets up his claustrophobia to panic mode. He doesn’t know where he is, but he’s closer to Will then either of them take comfort in.

Will keeps running.

And Louis is running out of time...

 

If you notice in the tags, vore is a part of the story, which kind of ruins the entire twist of the story, but it is expected. However, it's not true vore, as it's not sexual, which is why endosoma follows up vore immediately in tags. Endosoma is swallowing someone whole in order to protect them, and there are  no sexual feelings related to it.

It is a great read (though I've only read the first draft, not second) and like I said, the vore is not sexual, and is used as a horror and sci-fi device.

Excerpt of the first chapter:

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Massaru Devi rearranged the scalpels, scissors, and forceps on the surgical tray, the metal gleaming faintly in the inadequate light.  Brief streaks flitted across his graying hair and the water damaged ceiling.  He wiped down the dissecting table again, like a mother compulsively straightening the bed sheets for a house-guest.  It was the least he could do for the ones that came to him.  They probably didn’t expect a sixty year old Indian doctor to do their autopsy, but they never complained. 

The doors to the surgical theater swung open.  Two men in grey suits, their expressions as stony as the rest of the brainwashed workers on the compound, rolled in the latest sheet-covered body.  A note written in precise cursive was pinned to the sheet. 

To my Dear Dissector. 

The endearment left a cold quiver down Massaru’s back, but he kept a straight face in front of the two men, waving them forward to move the body onto the table.  They worked for Freewill, as did he in his persona.  But sometimes Massaru wondered if Retten knew where his true allegiance lay. 

The two men left as silently as they had come.   Massaru glared at the windows leading out into the hallway, imagining the welding and tweaking Retten did with his infernal machine down the hall.  He had no idea what the monstrous thing did, but Retten always delighted in sending the victims to him.

“Tell me, how did these men die?” Retten would ask, gums exposed as he smiled.  “That’s your puzzle when you’re not tending bruises and burn from the workers.” 

Every time, Massaru would give his best estimate of death, and the similarities to the bodies before.  Retten would smile all the wider, shaking his head. 

Massaru almost didn’t want to know. 

The nine story building, once a hospital, was a twisted shadow of its former self, now part of the Freewill compound.  The surgical theater was on the sixth floor, as was whatever Retten worked on, which made the floor, to Massaru, the dark heart of the beastly building. 

 

[Gov Hooka 8,008]

I'm sorry but I couldn't help but think of some gay **** movie or something when I read the title  

[PMKKARDASHiAN 8,570]

I enjoyed the read. Wish there was more! 

Spoiler

I get jealous reading soon to be published authors works because I want the same so bad, but this was very well written and had a nice flow. 10/10 would read the actual book! 

 

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12 minutes ago, Gov Hooka said:

I'm sorry but I couldn't help but think of some gay **** movie or something when I read the title  

Since it's a vore related pun, it's expected. Especially since William is gay.

The follow-up titles are fortunately different though.

1 - Man on the Inside
2 - Under My Skin
2.5 - M&Ms and Pretzels
3 - Inner Workings
3.5 - Cadbury Season

15 minutes ago, PMKKARDASHiAN said:

I enjoyed the read. Wish there was more! 

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I get jealous reading soon to be published authors works because I want the same so bad, but this was very well written and had a nice flow. 10/10 would read the actual book! 

 

You can read the original drafts of her works here. She's finished with everything up to Spilling Guts, which is her fourth installment.

http://peachnewt.deviantart.com/