Saetana 0 Posted February 13, 2012 Share Posted February 13, 2012 THIS MONSTER’S BALL On the stage the Lady stands On ever-changing shifting sands To sing, to dance, to entertain To perform for her fans again Poker Face and Bad Romance Paparazzi and Just Dance Her Telephone it rings so loud Heard above the roaring crowd Money Honey and The Fame It’s the Monster Ball again Teeth and Monsters here do dwell She Dances in the Dark so well I’m So Happy I Could Die Her live singing is no lie Piano goddess, keytar queen The best that there has ever been Quirky fashion and high art She aims well with her dark art To Marry the Night and not the day Gaga will never fade away She loves her fans the most you see She bleeds for us regularly And so we love her in return She will never crash and burn Music is the Lady’s life No ignorance, no fear, no strife She preaches love, acceptance too Because her religion’s you All of us should understand The simple message close at hand Be yourself and never stray Because we were all born this way Copyright Saetana February 2012 All Rights Reserved I'm not completely happy with the 6th verse but when the muse strikes I have to write or I forget about it by the next day. Not sure about the title either as its my second attempt (The Lay of Lady Gaga was the first), any better suggestions would be much appreciated ;) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vanilla 660 Posted February 13, 2012 Share Posted February 13, 2012 I like it I won't die, but I can't live without you Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Quartz 11,923 Posted February 13, 2012 Share Posted February 13, 2012 Great job! Other than you rhyming "art" with "art" and the usage of the word "regularly" ('twas a little awkward), it was really awesome. :lol: It gave me the feeling of anticipation like as if I myself were going to the ball. The beginning verses were really strong! Keep it up :lol: Inside, we are really made the same. 🕊 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kirilll 0 Posted February 13, 2012 Share Posted February 13, 2012 :clap: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amen Fashion 1,127 Posted February 13, 2012 Share Posted February 13, 2012 How cuteee xxx :flutter: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sheridan 3 Posted February 13, 2012 Share Posted February 13, 2012 Nice - I especially like the ending. If you want, you could make it flow a bit better (like that regularly) Also I'm not sure she would aim well ... maybe high? But otherwise I think it's really sweet Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saetana 0 Posted February 14, 2012 Author Share Posted February 14, 2012 Thanks, I didn't actually notice I'd rhymed art with art at first, lol, it came to me lying in bed last night. I need to tweak it a bit anyway, I'm not happy with the 6th verse and I can think of a couple of other small changes :) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saetana 0 Posted May 21, 2012 Author Share Posted May 21, 2012 The revised version, came on here to watch the Simpsons episode (why is the commentary topic locked btw?), checked my content and noticed I never posted the update, as Homer would say "doh!" LADY GAGA On the stage the Lady stands On ever-changing shifting sands To sing, to dance, to entertain To perform for her fans again Poker Face and Bad Romance Paparazzi and Just Dance Her Telephone it rings so loud Heard above the roaring crowd Money Honey and The Fame It’s the Monster Ball again Teeth and Monsters here do dwell She Dances in the Dark so well I’m So Happy I Could Die Her live singing is no lie Piano goddess, keytar queen The best that I have ever seen Quirky fashion and high art She aims well with her thrown dart Marry the Night and not the day Gaga will never fade away She loves her fans so much you see So warm and kind to you and me And so we love her in return She will never crash and burn Music is the Lady’s life No ignorance, no fear, no strife She preaches love, acceptance too Because her religion’s you All of us should understand The simple message close at hand Be yourself and never stray Because we were all born this way Copyright Saetana February 2012 All Rights Reserved Not many changes but hopefully it flows better now ;o) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gaga is Life 90 Posted May 23, 2012 Share Posted May 23, 2012 Beautiful :clap: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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