A Beaverhausen 280 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 Mannequin Sex your security, Interrogate You're my prison, Nobody home dead inside, electrocute Make me feel alive Pull the trigger Don't hold back Blow my mind on top, dominate Lord Forgive, I ****ed up again Whiskey with regret A shot to remember who I am You know what they say When in Rome Liberte, Nobody knows my name Vampire prostitute Numb to the world insecure, Here I am No reflection, Killer heels, red lipstick Addicted to You Life a cabaret, Smoke your Cigarette Drown this sorrow Whiskey with regret Bad memories, Hall of fame Zero gravity, can't breathe Alice in wonderland, Lost and never found No one can hear you scream hooker Hollywood Wolves in the night darkness surrounding Mausoleum Nobody home dead inside Wake me when I'm famous Mannequin, The fame ***** ****ographic pain love intoxicated this is the fashion fake louis Vuitton ,A titanic love affair Another rich blonde, gimme more this ain't living, shipwrecked, going no where Sex your security interrogate, fresh meat you're my prison, no escape broke in New York swallow this sorrow nobody home dead inside Sold my soul remember me tomorrow crucified, Burn the evidence Paparazzi forever in gold Pull the trigger I'm ready It's showtime MACBETH Applaud I'm all yours scream Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guy Above You 57 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
garnite 8 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 maybe you should update the thread you made in the first place instead of making a new thread every time you tweak something that's as of now still a work in progress? just for future reference ^_^ Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
A Beaverhausen 280 Posted November 13, 2014 Author Share Posted November 13, 2014 maybe you should update the thread you made in the first place instead of making a new thread every time you tweak something that's as of now still a work in progress? just for future reference ^_^ thanks, still just working out how to use this! good idea :) Sorry for spamming! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
ByeBye49 161 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 Isn't this an update of your last thread? I would suggest editing yout old one. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
wiltedbliss 915 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 I just realized you're 30. Wtf and so? If you have nothing to say about the song, then leave. @OP I really like the song! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
A Beaverhausen 280 Posted November 13, 2014 Author Share Posted November 13, 2014 Wtf and so? If you have nothing to say about the song, then leave. @OP I really like the song! Thanks heaps! was just wanting to share my progress, considering this is only my second post ever, settle down crazy kids hahaha so much shade on here! Intense......Love to all ;) You are rad x Glad someone liked my song! made my day :) thanks again Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
ByeBye49 161 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 Ooops I forgot to say the song is going good so far. :) Needs more work but you're going okay for now... Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gianni Versace 2,987 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 It's incomprehensible... It's like some crazy gang-bang of Monster, Judas and Teeth. I'm 15 and I'm not afraid to say I could write something better. rude. I think this would be great if it was polished and chiseled into a cohesive body and was separated into chunks for each part of the song. I really love the word choice and imagery though. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
A Beaverhausen 280 Posted November 13, 2014 Author Share Posted November 13, 2014 rude. I think this would be great if it was polished and chiseled into a cohesive body and was separated into chunks for each part of the song. I really love the word choice and imagery though. thanks heaps! glad someone liked it :) haha Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThatSLAYGUY 68 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 What kinda tune would this go to? Just to get an idea :) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yanko 9,860 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 I just realized you're 30. It's incomprehensible... It's like some crazy gang-bang of Monster, Judas and Teeth. I'm 15 and I'm not afraid to say I could write something better. rude Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
homomo 23,837 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 It's incomprehensible... It's like some crazy gang-bang of Monster, Judas and Teeth. I'm 15 and I'm not afraid to say I could write something better. There are certain things that should be left unsaid, and your reply was one of them. There are many other ways of saying this. You picked the worst possible way to say it. Shame on you. 0110100001100101011011000110110001101111 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
PMKKARDASHiAN 8,570 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 I actually really like this. I agree with a user above, good imagery. The word choices are very interesting. Ps don't let certain ignorant users get you down. People on here forget how to act but use the shield of a computer/phone and act like arrogant brats when in reality, they would probably get the brakes beat off them. Sad. But keep going on the writing, I enjoyed it :) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
johnpe 916 Posted November 13, 2014 Share Posted November 13, 2014 It's like a mix of Dope, Bad Romance, Future Love and Lana Del Rey MAKE IT WORK Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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