DONOVAN 0 Posted December 5, 2013 Share Posted December 5, 2013 I wrote my friend Caitlyn a song. She self harms alot, and it concerns me. So, I wrote her a song as an attempt to get her to stop. It's about cutting. Comment constructive criticism. No rude comments please. VERSE ONE. Help me through I need you. We've lost it all. Don't let me fall. Help me up... and make that cut. We've lost it all Dont let me fall. FIRST PRE-CHORUS How did you find me? Baby, come set me free. I crave that red release. FIRST CHORUS. I feel like I'm on top of the mountain. Take me to your crimson fountain. Without you my life is no fun. Thanks... ADDICTION. VERSE TWO. I love you, I mean it too. We've got it all You make me strong. I love you so, Don't ever go. We've got it all You make me strong. SECOND PRE-CHORUS I love your red lipstick babe. Your kisses cover me. I feel high, I'm finally here. SECOND CHORUS. I'm so lonely up here on this mountain. Drowning, cant find air in my fountain. Save me, I just need someone. Thanks.... ADDICTION. BRIDGE How could you do this to me? We were perfect, just you and me. Look at the mess you've made. My scars wont fade. FINAL CHORUS. Never going back up that mountain, Never taking a dip in that fountain. Goodbye Love, we're finally done. Thanks.... ADDICTION. Should I tweak it more? How should I show her/perform it? Thanks guys. :) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Michael 533 Posted December 5, 2013 Share Posted December 5, 2013 I like it. The first verse reminds me of the first verse of You Lost Me by Christina Aguilera. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DONOVAN 0 Posted December 5, 2013 Author Share Posted December 5, 2013 I like it. The first verse reminds me of the first verse of You Lost Me by Christina Aguilera. Oh my gosh, it does! Not even intentional tbh. :oops: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Howl 2 Posted December 5, 2013 Share Posted December 5, 2013 I like it. The first verse reminds me of the first verse of You Lost Me by Christina Aguilera. OMG, that's so true! Â Beautiful lyrics and the intention, though. Congrats!! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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DONOVAN 0 Posted December 5, 2013 Author Share Posted December 5, 2013 OMG, that's so true! Â Beautiful lyrics and the intention, though. Congrats!! Thanks guys! I apperciate it. :runhug: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lassex 1,169 Posted December 5, 2013 Share Posted December 5, 2013 It's beautiful. And it's straight from your heart! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asia 269 Posted December 8, 2013 Share Posted December 8, 2013 I loved the reason of why you wrote it  Are you gonna show her these lyrics? :) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DONOVAN 0 Posted December 8, 2013 Author Share Posted December 8, 2013 I loved the reason of why you wrote it  Are you gonna show her these lyrics? :) Yeah, I showed her. She liked it alot, but she still cuts. Its okay though. I understand though, I used to cut alot, so I kinda wrote this song for myself too. It really does get like an addiction after a while. I dont blame her, but whatever. Atleast I wrote a kickass song. I'm a songwriter btw. PM me for more. :yes: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rodrig0 0 Posted December 9, 2013 Share Posted December 9, 2013 You make me strong. I love you so, Don't ever go. oh man, i loved these lyrics, it reminds me when some months ago i was in love and all i was thinking was things like this owwww this is very special Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DONOVAN 0 Posted December 9, 2013 Author Share Posted December 9, 2013 You make me strong. I love you so, Don't ever go. oh man, i loved these lyrics, it reminds me when some months ago i was in love and all i was thinking was things like this owwww this is very special I'm glad you like them. :hug: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
My Little Phoney 658 Posted December 9, 2013 Share Posted December 9, 2013 Wow, nice  'red release' makes me think of period blood though Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DONOVAN 0 Posted December 9, 2013 Author Share Posted December 9, 2013 Wow, nice 'red release' makes me think of period blood though :dead: :dead: Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rodrig0 0 Posted December 9, 2013 Share Posted December 9, 2013 I'm glad you like them. awww, it's nice 2 know there are little monsters like u in this world Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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