Bambino 24,058 Posted March 24, 2013 Share Posted March 24, 2013 That's fierce! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bambino 24,058 Posted March 24, 2013 Share Posted March 24, 2013 They're good ;) Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jjang 2,262 Posted March 24, 2013 Share Posted March 24, 2013 I remember my first days of posting my songs on GGD I was so excited of getting judged and getting exposed to GGD Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bambino 24,058 Posted March 24, 2013 Share Posted March 24, 2013 Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chucky 39 Posted March 24, 2013 Share Posted March 24, 2013 U shouldn't be thinking such thoughts for another person :ohno: Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Molly Aphrodite 241 Posted March 24, 2013 Share Posted March 24, 2013 (edited) The verses (I assume their verses, the stanzas that start with 'I'm not thinking straight' and 'My heart will not die') are not as strong as they could/should be with a song like this. They're a little too short and simple, and don't effectively capture the emotion that the rest of the song does. The chorus (once again, I assume the chorus) is really really good. It has this grunge-y feel to it while also seeming like a pop song. And the 'hook' ("I think I'm over overdosing now, And I think that you know how") is really simple but effective. I like it! Overall it has great potential and some great moments, but the verses don't seem to effect the audience in the way that they should. Edited March 27, 2013 by HeavyMetalShit Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axl Jax 527 Posted March 24, 2013 Share Posted March 24, 2013 My new track Lights! please check it out :) Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KING5KAT 223 Posted March 25, 2013 Share Posted March 25, 2013 I f*cking hate editing vocals. Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonnaDiana 0 Posted March 25, 2013 Share Posted March 25, 2013 A Work in progress. Thought I would share with you all... With Her Eyes Closed She’s not alone But she is lonely She’s got to move on show them who’s wrong This girl is strong But not when she’s alone She will mend at the seems But fear all her dreams With her eyes closed There is nothing she knows She is stronger when asleep This girl who is a freak; She is only different But lost in her own image; with her eyes closed tonight she dies Whilst tonight you cry Over her dead body lifeless and cold Her eyes are forever, forever closed Forever closed forever closed forever forever Forever closed It’s all over But was it worth it? She’s now gone away Never to come back She falls asleep And tries to see that nothing was true Her body lifeless and blue With her eyes closed There is nothing she knows She is stronger when asleep This girl who is a freak; She is only different But lost in her own image; with her eyes closed tonight she dies Whilst tonight you cry Over her dead body lifeless and cold Her eyes are forever, forever closed Forever closed forever closed Forever, forever ,Forever closed She will wake one day To realise her life on the front page She won’t want to remember How her life went up in flames She was to blame For the lies and hatred That made me stray away With her eyes closed There is nothing she knows She is stronger when asleep This girl who is a freak; She is only different But lost in her own image; with her eyes closed tonight she dies Whilst tonight you cry Over her dead body lifeless and cold Her eyes are forever, forever closed With her eyes closed She will sleep once again They will remain forever closed Forever closed Forever closed This is something I am working on I will finish it soon... I got the idea down first and thought I must share this! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KING5KAT 223 Posted March 25, 2013 Share Posted March 25, 2013 She’s not alone But she is lonely She’s got to move on show them who’s wrong This girl is strong But not when she’s alone She will mend at the seems But fear all her dreams Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonnaDiana 0 Posted March 25, 2013 Share Posted March 25, 2013 like I said work in progress... I have just got the idea down and now I will finilise it in the next coming weeks... unless my novel takes over... plus I am moving jobs... so who knows maybe I will lose my writing ability all together.... Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mariano 958 Posted March 25, 2013 Share Posted March 25, 2013 My new track Lights! please check it out :) really goood ! Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Molly Aphrodite 241 Posted March 27, 2013 Share Posted March 27, 2013 (edited) Hey guys! It's that time again.. Season 2 of GGD's songwriting competition Platinum Hit starts on Saturday! Here is the link to the first season so you can see how the game works - http://gagadaily.com/index.php?showtopic=35974&page=132#entry2257017 Platinum Hit combines lyric creation, subject exploration, light-hearted competition, and a sense of community. We had several contestants from this very thread play last season, and ended up making it very far! We would love to have anybody who's interested check out the signups on Saturday and hopefully join our game! :excited: Edited March 27, 2013 by HeavyMetalShit Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bowie 4 Posted March 27, 2013 Share Posted March 27, 2013 Hey guys! It's that time again.. Season 2 of GGD's songwriting competition Platinum Hit starts on Saturday! Here is the link to the first season so you can see how the game works - http://gagadaily.com/index.php?showtopic=35974&page=132#entry2257017 Platinum Hit combines lyric creation, subject exploration, light-hearted competition, and a sense of community. We had several contestants from this very thread play last season, and ended up making it very far! We would love to have anybody who's interested check out the signups on Saturday and hopefully join our game! Joining tbh Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Buoy Boy 1 Posted March 27, 2013 Share Posted March 27, 2013 Opinions plz? Baby im just like a pretty mirage Amongst the air im camouflage Intangible, impossible to touch A vivid dream and then you wake up Im as transparent as a window pane Im a victim of my own wicked game And when you caress my heart of glass Dont be surprised if it goes smash I wish I could write my own life story prose But baby this is the life I chose I owe it to myself Every day playing out a part On a stage wooden as my own heart And I swear i'll play it well Its hard to drag me down you see When ive got a hologram heartbeat Baby im just like a beautiful oasis Leave you thirsting for more and baby that's my basis Never enough, i'll never quench your desires I'll keep shrivelling up until im drier and drier Im as open as an empty book But I wont let anybody look And when you go to turn the page Dont be surprised if its ripped out today I wish I could write my own life story prose But baby this is the life I chose I owe it to myself Every day playing out a part On a stage wooden as my own heart And I swear i'll play it well Its hard to drag me down you see When ive got a hologram heartbeat You just wanted to mend my heart But I played you like a golden harp Sweet melody across the sky When I rust over, the music dies How can I reveal if what I feel isnt real? If the truth is a lie is my disguise a surprise? Im confused, im abused, I dont know what to do Nothing to lose Open my mouth, without a doubt, I wanna shout, let it all out I wish I could write my own life story prose But baby this is the life I chose I owe it to myself Every day playing out a part On a stage wooden as my own heart And I swear i'll play it well Its hard to drag me down you see When ive got a hologram heartbeat Can you see me now? Can you feel me now? Can you taste me now? Can you touch me now? Can you see me now? Quote Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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