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TrueWillis

Hey guys please listen to my new track and let me know what you think :) http://soundcloud.com/truewillis/you-are-my-hell

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ELECTRAHEARTPOP

I'm beginning to try and write lyrics, would it be okay if I posted them in this thread and someone critiqued them and gave me feedback?

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I'm beginning to try and write lyrics, would it be okay if I posted them in this thread and someone critiqued them and gave me feedback?

I will. :hug: I'm a songwriter too!

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ELECTRAHEARTPOP

I will. :hug: I'm a songwriter too!

Well I've got a few, they're unfinished but here you go:

Just One Last Chance

Tried to ignore you,

Made me feel better somehow,

But after wasted apologies,

I regret it now,

It made sense to me,

Blocking you out from my life,

Like a phoenix from the ashes,

But in my back was a knife,

Please listen to me,

Just one more chance,

Just one final kiss,

Just one last dance,

Please listen to me,

I would erase the past,

If it would mean,

Just one last chance, (For you and me)

I sat in the kitchen,

Staring blank into space,

Recalling the times,

When I was in his place,

You said we were friends,

Forever it seemed,

I refused to listen,

And now my heart bleeds,

Please listen to me,

Just one more chance,

Just one final kiss,

Just one last dance,

Please listen to me,

I would erase the past,

If it would mean,

Just one last chance, (For you and me)

Then I hear a familiar sound,

Your voice is what I hear all around,

You’re beside me again,

Is this happiness I’ve found?

Please listen to me,

Just one more chance,

Just one final kiss,

Just one last dance,

Please listen to me,

I would erase the past,

If it would mean,

Just one last chance, (For you and me)

In A Spin (only got a verse and a chorus)

I took the blame,

For the things you said,

The things you did,

I believed the lies,

That you fed to me,

They sank deeply,

I was quite content,

Being your friend,

Until the end,

I was blind to you,

To your games,

To your aims,

You thought I was weak,

You saw me as faithful,

But I grew strong,

And for that I’m grateful,

Did someone knock?

Knock you on the head,

Cause you’re falling,

Falling faster than lead,

I hope you pay,

You pay for your sins,

Or you’ll end up,

In A Spin,

For The Money (everything except a bridge)

Do you remember who you were,

Back last summer,

What happened to who you are?

Now you’re just a distant star,

You were never supposed to be,

More than just for me,

But these days you’ve changed,

Your plans rearranged,

You were blinded by the lights,

The highway lit up,

So you followed,

For me it’s just lonely nights,

You’ve left me,

For the money,

You wanted more than me,

I couldn’t stop you,

To love is to let go,

You craved the attention,

You felt passion,

For the money,

For the money,

For the money,

Hollywood seemed like a getaway,

But you got to watch the cards you play,

I was left once more,

Only trace the unlocked door,

Since when did you want the American dream?

Killer housewife, beauty queen,

Your hearts in the wrong place,

You’re brain in its place,

You were blinded by the lights,

The highway lit up,

So you followed,

For me it’s just lonely nights,

You’ve left me,

For the money,

You wanted more than me,

I couldn’t stop you,

To love is to let go,

You craved the attention,

You felt passion,

For the money,

For the money,

For the money,

Welcome to all constructive criticism guys!

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Well I've got a few, they're unfinished but here you go:

Just One Last Chance

Tried to ignore you,

Made me feel better somehow,

But after wasted apologies,

I regret it now,

It made sense to me,

Blocking you out from my life,

Like a phoenix from the ashes,

But in my back was a knife,

Please listen to me,

Just one more chance,

Just one final kiss,

Just one last dance,

Please listen to me,

I would erase the past,

If it would mean,

Just one last chance, (For you and me)

I sat in the kitchen,

Staring blank into space,

Recalling the times,

When I was in his place,

You said we were friends,

Forever it seemed,

I refused to listen,

And now my heart bleeds,

Please listen to me,

Just one more chance,

Just one final kiss,

Just one last dance,

Please listen to me,

I would erase the past,

If it would mean,

Just one last chance, (For you and me)

Then I hear a familiar sound,

Your voice is what I hear all around,

You’re beside me again,

Is this happiness I’ve found?

Please listen to me,

Just one more chance,

Just one final kiss,

Just one last dance,

Please listen to me,

I would erase the past,

If it would mean,

Just one last chance, (For you and me)

In A Spin (only got a verse and a chorus)

I took the blame,

For the things you said,

The things you did,

I believed the lies,

That you fed to me,

They sank deeply,

I was quite content,

Being your friend,

Until the end,

I was blind to you,

To your games,

To your aims,

You thought I was weak,

You saw me as faithful,

But I grew strong,

And for that I’m grateful,

Did someone knock?

Knock you on the head,

Cause you’re falling,

Falling faster than lead,

I hope you pay,

You pay for your sins,

Or you’ll end up,

In A Spin,

For The Money (everything except a bridge)

Do you remember who you were,

Back last summer,

What happened to who you are?

Now you’re just a distant star,

You were never supposed to be,

More than just for me,

But these days you’ve changed,

Your plans rearranged,

You were blinded by the lights,

The highway lit up,

So you followed,

For me it’s just lonely nights,

You’ve left me,

For the money,

You wanted more than me,

I couldn’t stop you,

To love is to let go,

You craved the attention,

You felt passion,

For the money,

For the money,

For the money,

Hollywood seemed like a getaway,

But you got to watch the cards you play,

I was left once more,

Only trace the unlocked door,

Since when did you want the American dream?

Killer housewife, beauty queen,

Your hearts in the wrong place,

You’re brain in its place,

You were blinded by the lights,

The highway lit up,

So you followed,

For me it’s just lonely nights,

You’ve left me,

For the money,

You wanted more than me,

I couldn’t stop you,

To love is to let go,

You craved the attention,

You felt passion,

For the money,

For the money,

For the money,

Welcome to all constructive criticism guys!

For a beginner it's definitely a good start. Trust me, looking back on the past I can see how far my work has come. But here is my ultimate writers advice for you....

Think outside the box, brainstorm ideas that are crazy and unthinkable. Your love songs are very nice indeed, but it's been said before. As for it's structure it's nice, but it does need some tweaking. Another good writing tip, is writing a story. Like an outline of movie plot, and turning it into a song. Because a song that tells a consistent story, is a song that people will relate to. And once you come up with an outline of the story aka song's plot, it's as easy as 1, 2, 3.

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ELECTRAHEARTPOP

For a beginner it's definitely a good start. Trust me, looking back on the past I can see how far my work has come. But here is my ultimate writers advice for you....

Think outside the box, brainstorm ideas that are crazy and unthinkable. Your love songs are very nice indeed, but it's been said before. As for it's structure it's nice, but it does need some tweaking. Another good writing tip, is writing a story. Like an outline of movie plot, and turning it into a song. Because a song that tells a consistent story, is a song that people will relate to. And once you come up with an outline of the story aka song's plot, it's as easy as 1, 2, 3.

Thank you, I'll definitely take your criticism on board and value it :)

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Nothing serious, I was experimenting with a few gaga acapellas on my computer. :)

http://soundcloud.com/daneastonmusic/dan-easton-stache

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Rollercoaster

I met a guy who's last name was screaming for a song to be written with its title. "Glasspool" holy crap that is a good ass name.

I've written, this week... at work.. when bored and frustrated (which seems to get my juices flowing)

Glasspool

This is a metaphor for forbidden love, or lack of love. It speaks of wanting to go and swim in the glass pools with all the other lovers who are so deep in their love together in the glass pools that they are hurting eachother. It's kind of about abuse and heartbreak.

Orchid Showers

It's about loving someone so much you could drown them.

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Is anyone interested in "performing" at our end of the year GagaDaily Awards? Basically what it involves... the Awards "show" takes place on TinyChat. We don't have a designated night yet. There will be some sort of allotted slot (or slots) for performers, and whoever is chosen will go on webcam and perform! Is anyone interested? Feel free to PM me if you have any questions!

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