Are These Song Lyrics Any Good?

[Reality 65,701]

So, I don't know if this is even the right section, so hopefully this doesn't get moved

But anyways to the topic at hand: I've always been into poetry. I love coming up with poems and even though I use to draw and paint a lot, I've recently (well, relatively recently) been getting into music into a more theoretical level. I love music and I want to learn more about it and hopefully one day produce a song or two, however, I wanted to take my talents (or at least, what I think are my talents) and transform them into making a song.

I don't know if these are really any good, or if their generic, if they're garbage, or if they're amazing. So, I just wanted to get a few opinions on them. I make a reference to Gaga in one of them, so...

Hopefully you guys like them, and please, I'd like to get any constructive criticisms you guys may have on them. Thanks in advance!

**PS: No, I have not even come up with melodies for them, these are strictly just lyrics**

Perfect Fantasy:

Spoiler

Perfect Fantasy

 

Verse 1

Didn’t tell me that you loved me,
It didn’t fuel the beast inside,
Like a sailor, I’m lost at sea,
When I watched you part of me died,
It felt different, you and I,
And when no one else is around,
I could just stare at you,
Not making a sound

 

Pre-chorus

You knock me off my feet,
Something tells me we’re not done,
Every moment with you, so sweet
Something tells me you’re the one

 

Chrous

Wanted a kiss,
Your smile is something I miss,
Get out of my head,
And into my bed,
Take me away,
Lead me astray,
It’s not blasphemy,
But a perfect fantasy,
(A perfect fantasy)
(A perfect fantasy)

 

Verse 2

Time after time thought you were mine,
The way you touch me on my leg,
I’ll wait three years, no, six, no, nine,
Livin’ in a tough powder keg,
Can’t fathom life without you,
And when I do, it hurts too much,
It’s our last year, don’t leave,
Forgetting that touch

 

Pre-chorus

You knock me off my feet,
Something tells me we’re not done,
Every moment with you, so sweet
Something tells me you’re the one

 

Chrous

Wanted a kiss,
Your smile is something I miss,
Get out of my head,
And into my bed,
Take me away,
Lead me astray,
It’s not blasphemy,
But a perfect fantasy,
(A perfect fantasy)
(A perfect fantasy)

 

Bridge

Have I run out of time?
Would it matter anyway?
Seeing you happy with her,
Is both a blessing and a curse,
Not trying to be selfish,
Just entertaining a thought,
Not wanting to let you go,
But is it worth a shot?

 

Final Chorus

Wanted a kiss,
Your smile is something I miss,
Get out of my head,
And into my bed,
Take me away,
Lead me astray,
It’s not blasphemy,
But a perfect fantasy,
(A perfect fantasy)
(A perfect fantasy)
Lead me to a perfect fantasy

 

Three and a Half Minutes:

Spoiler

Three and a Half Minutes

 

Verse 1

A new place, a new dimension,
The beat of a drum, gaining all my attention,
I was living in a broken home,
In my head, running away from Rome,
The chords provide harmony,
It takes me worlds away,
And for a moment my world doesn’t look like an ashtray

 

Pre-chorus

Five foot two, and still mean,
Can write a song and still make a scene,
Situation so dire,
The melody is something that inspires

 

Chorus

Taken away to a better place,
Put in a better mind,
Only takes three and a half minutes,
To make me work past my limits,
Only takes three and a half minutes,
To make me work past my limits

 

Verse 2

Lie in bed and dance back and forth,
Let the music move you, hear the voice in the mic,
With your leather and your boots with spikes,
Block the shouting and the fear,
Dancin’ hours on end,
Looking at the mirror on the ceiling and my arms extend

 

Pre-chorus

Five foot two, and still mean,
Can write a song and still make a scene,
Situation so dire,
The melody is something that inspires

 

Chorus

Taken away to a better place,
Put in a better mind,
Only takes three and a half minutes,
To make me work past my limits,
Only takes three and a half minutes,
To make me work past my limits

 

Bridge

Not seven minutes in Heaven,
Or his late night sessions,
Compare to the sound in my ears,
They can make me laugh or make me cry,
Leaving me in tears,
Tossing and turning,
Slippin’ and slidin’,
And for a moment I’m gliding

 

Final Chorus

Taken away to a better place,
Put in a better mind,
Only takes three and a half minutes,
To make me work past my limits,
Only takes three and a half minutes,
To make me work past my limits,
Stay for a few,
Leave never,
It only takes three and a half minutes,
To get lost forever

 

 

Angels are Aliens:

Spoiler

Angels are Aliens

 

Verse 1

Trusted you like a brother,
You know some people have real problems,
You and I were something, another,
You are totally foreign,
You might has well have moved away,
You know I am not someone to betray

 

Pre-chorus

Cut the bullshit,
You’re nothing but a hypocrite,
You weren’t there,
And it wasn’t fair

 

Chorus

Angels are aliens,
They’re people in disguise,
They earn your trust,
And look you straight in the eyes,
Angels are aliens,
People unknown,
Angels are aliens,
They’re not beautiful gemstones

 

Verse 2

You were suppose to be there,
Helping me out, saving me from them,
Not looking like a total stranger,
When their friend is in danger,
Trust is like a broken mirror,
When you get nearer, it gets clearer

 

Pre-chorus

Cut the bullshit,
You’re nothing but a hypocrite,
You weren’t there,
And it wasn’t fair

 

Chorus

Angels are aliens,
They’re people in disguise,
They earn your trust,
And look you straight in the eyes,
Angels are aliens,
People unknown,
Angels are aliens,
They’re not beautiful gemstones

 

Bridge

I was naive like a little kid,
And maybe for a second,
You weren’t an illusion,
But time’s up I reckon,
When the going gets tough,
The tough get going

 

Final chorus

Angels are aliens,
They’re people in disguise,
In disguise,
They earn your trust,
And look you straight in the eyes,
Angels are aliens,
Angels are aliens,
People unknown,
Angels are aliens,
They’re not beautiful gemstones

 

 

[Tom Nook 37,718]

I like the first two I get Lorde vibes also that Five Foot Two reference  I think Angels are Aliens could be better it’s a little amateurish 

[Reality 65,701]

Just now, Gardevoir said:

I like the first two I get Lorde vibes also that Five Foot Two reference  I think Angels are Aliens could be better it’s a little amateurish 

That's good

I wrote AAA in like 15 minutes just cause I was bored today and I wanted something to do  What part specifically could use work?

[Trepadation 5,566]

Sounds like lana lyrics except their isn't a month, daddy, money, americana, or cars. If you add those things you can ghost write for her

[Tom Nook 37,718]

1 minute ago, M Monstre said:

That's good

I wrote AAA in like 15 minutes just cause I was bored today and I wanted something to do  What part specifically could use work?

The pre-chorus is a little blunt, and when going gets tough in the bridge sounds corny but 15 minutes is still impressive 

[PeterPan 0]

its better than anything I wrote

[Reality 65,701]

17 minutes ago, Gardevoir said:

The pre-chorus is a little blunt, and when going gets tough in the bridge sounds corny but 15 minutes is still impressive 

I rewrote the verses (cause now looking back at it, they really weren't that good) and the prechorus as well as the bridge. Hopefully this is better????

Spoiler

Angels are Aliens

 

Verse 1

I trusted you with all my heart,
Led me to heaven right from the start,
Looking down up on the clouds,
Took me in your arms,
Your charisma was your charm,
But then you took me by surprise,
Spoiled the good wine,
And left me to die

 

Pre-chorus

I see through your bullshit,
See through your facade,
I’m not here so you can benefit,
You’re no god

 

Chorus

Angels are aliens,
They’re people in disguise,
They earn your trust,
And look you straight in the eyes,
Angels are aliens,
People unknown,
Angels are aliens,
They’re not beautiful gemstones

 

Verse 2

You left me crying in the rain,
Took me into the sky to your ship,
Leavin’ me like a stranger,
Your friend, in danger,
Trust is a broken mirror,
When you get nearer, it’s clearer,
Light from above,
But it ain’t no dove

Pre-chorus

I see through your bullshit,
See through your facade,
I’m not here so you can benefit,
You’re no god

 

Chorus

Angels are aliens,
They’re people in disguise,
They earn your trust,
And look you straight in the eyes,
Angels are aliens,
People unknown,
Angels are aliens,
They’re not beautiful gemstones

 

Bridge

For a second,
You weren’t an illusion,
But time’s up I reckon,
All the lies you gave,
And the broken promises you made,
I was on my knees and prayed,
That this was just another lie,
Cause deep down, 
I didn't want to say goodbye

 

Final chorus

Angels are aliens,
They’re people in disguise,
In disguise,
They earn your trust,
And look you straight in the eyes,
Angels are aliens,
Angels are aliens,
People unknown,
Angels are aliens,
They’re not beautiful gemstones

 

 

[Stevo 623]

Lana is shook